Christin watched as people walked on by, their footsteps on the hallway floor seemed to echo in her ears. She watched as everyone else hurried for their books and pencils, she had all she needed on her knees, on the silk of her black dress. She was just counting time until the bell rang. 5-4-3-2-1-0. The bell gave a shriek and thats when the fun began. Everyone seemed to create a stampede. A smile found a way to Christin's face, she greeted it.1
When the hall seemed safe, she stood and began walking to chemistry. She walked by Mrs.Falci, the gym teacher. She ignored the sneer. Before entering the classroom she checked to see if her black lipstick had smeared or if her victorian dress had any dust on it,nope. Then she walked through the doors, fashionably late, once again.
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just an idea i reeeallt want to pursue
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Hmmm there are so many posibilitys of where this could go. It is sounding like a predictable plot though... I dunno you could go in a totally different direction and all of a sudden its not pradictable but yea anywho. I think there is a good start here.
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P1 has several run-on sentences. You might want to add a semicolon to the first sentence, or break the second part off completely and make it a seperate entity. The same goes for te second sentence.
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