What Jason and Delilah saw was something unexpecting. Now before you guess, let me tell you this. It was two people, not one. So think about it. You may know one, but I can almost guarantee you will not know the second.1
"I don't believe this," growled Delilah under her breath. She stomped over to the two people, and asked one of the two what they were doing. "Walter, who the *bunny* is she?" she roared, slapping him across the face. "And you yelled at me!"2
"I loved you, Delilah. Until that *bunny* came and ruined our relationship. Then I started seeing Gloria, and she makes me happy," he explained with pride. Then he wrapped his arm around Gloria's shoulder. "Oh yeah, where is the *bunny*?"3
Expecting for Jason to run off, instead he stepped up into action like a hero and yelled, "I'm right here, Walter."4
Walter got off the bench, and swung a punch at Jason. Gloria seemed excited but Delilah cried. She knew how tough Walter was, even to girls. His punch hit Jason's nose, and it started to bleed. Without saying ouch or owie, Jason fought back by shoving Walter back. "Leave Del alone!" he snapped, aiming for his mouth. With a huge slam, Jason hit his mouth, and a tooth fell out.5
"Oww, you *bunny*!" he wailed in pain, laying on the ground. Gloria got off of the bench, and helped her new boyfriend from total pain.6
Simultaneously, Delilah and Jason ran as fast as they could away, running for their life. Luckily, Walter didn't even run back because he was in so much pain. They both made it home safely, and just before Jason's parents came in.7
Author notes
So... the moment we've all been waiting for... the fight! I know you guys asked for it!
Was it a good fight?
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Might want to change the text color/background combo - it's a little heard to read.
Anyways, I think it was a pretty good scene. I would suggest changing the 'ow or owie' part, it doesn't fit. But other than that, good job.
Just wondering - what's the time frame in this story?
-Paradox -
very nice fight, so Jason won, very very nice =DD I like it, but you might want to change the color scheme, this was almost immposible for me to read, anyway, gotta go read the next chapter, great story, keep it up =DD
-Dani -
good fight. but the color scheme is a bit of a prob
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Awww this was good, Again the color made it hard to read!
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*BUNNY*
*bunny* that was good! woo! i wanted more action, though. I still like *bunny*!
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Ooh, I didn't see that coming! Loved this part! So dramatic! Also, you might want to change the font color, it's a little hard on the eyes...but great part!!
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OUCH! Good work.
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Yeah, Walter seemed the kind of guy who would pick up some random girl after being dumped. Love the story line. I do wish you would choose your colors a little differently for your fonts.
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I loved the fight ! I want to here more!
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No actually, they made it to their own house.
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The FIGHT!!! It was an awesome fight and I loved every minute of it. Jason kinda won and he actually proved he was tough. I didn't expect Gloria either.
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I thought someone was going to die xP
Delilah went with Jason to his house? ho boy xD
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