Dunno

Since my first day of reasonable thought, I've sat on the edge of reason kicking my feet as I stared down into all of the things that could have been and might still be. I've always laughed in the face of every thing I didn't like, and I've liked all the things that everybody else did not. You are not one of those things. I love you just like everyone else.1

For every way you're different, you're exactly the same. I never thought I'd be just another worn remnant left behind by an emotional juggernaut. Here I am, though, face down in a puddle of my own filthy amazement. I'm nothing more to you than another weathered heartbeat anchored to another broken smile. I let this happen. 2

You are an enigma; an esoteric rhythm in the gusting wind. You are as abstruse as love and easily more ambiguous. You are smoke to my embrace and nothing but a breeze on my lips. You leave me feeling nothing but empty.3

It was your eyes that caused all of this. In them, I could see nowhere that you've been and all the places you'd never go. They're testaments of life's horrorshow. I wanted it to be my shoulder that caught their tears.4

...Will finish later...

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This will come in installments. Get ready to wait...if that makes sense.

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  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    June 4, 2005
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    An interesting little start. A think a lot of people should be able to relate to this, as it's quite common for a lot of people to fall for someone, they never thought they would...

    Loved the line:

    ~~I never thought I'd be just another worn remnant left behind by an emotional juggernaut.~~

    Think it was your most poetic one, that had the tinture.

  • five40
    June 4, 2005
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    Great start here, it has nice rythym and the story just pulled me along the whole way. I ilke that in a story, most of them I don't get past the first paragraph. I read the whole thing. It will be nice to see more. Thanks for sharing this. Peace.


  • infinite spirit
    May 23, 2005
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    this is....amazing....intense. i love it. its nice to know that someone else on this website not only knows, but usus words such as "ambiguous" lol.