You are in a lunchroom at your new highschool. Everything is new to your perspective. The floors seem too shiny to you and the ceiling is covered in gum. You see hundreds of students, ranging near and farther from your age, but still teens none the less. You aren't greeted and you aren't tols 'welcome' by anyone. 1
You are an outisder.2
You are the new apple to look at and to experiment on.3
Too everyone in the room you are a new piece of flesh that signifies 'plaything'.4
To the girls you are merely a threat of popularity.5
But to the boys, you are a new challenge to use to make people jealous or merely there knew game. 6
You are a girl named Janie.7
You are sixteen years old. 8
A boy that is probably five-nine in height, skinny but muscular, dark haired and eyed, and strickingly handsome approaches you where you sit. You suppose he feels sorry for you because you are alone. 9
"What is your name?" He asks you.10
"Janie," You answer. 11
As he is about to open his mouth to ask another question a girl who is tall and covered in designer clothing approaches. She owns the territory apparently. 12
"My name is Claire and let me officially welcome you," As you stand up, because you think she wants to shake hands, she reaches for you milk on your tray of food and pours it onto your head.The boy doesnt smile at her gesture but the lunch room explodes in laughter. 13
You feel the wet drip down your clothes and you stare at her as she walks away. 14
YOu leave your tray behind and walk out into the hallway and take of your wet clothes, luckily you put extra shirts on this morning.15
The boy suddenly appears to you again, noticing your struggling to riggle free from your horrid clothing. He helps you pull them off and then hands them to you. 16
In four seconds you'll find out his name is Lucas. 17
In ten days you'll find out he likes math, science and art.18
In three months he'll asks you out.19
In four months you'll share your first kiss with him.20
In ten months he'll tell you he loves you for the first time.21
In two years you'll go to college with him.22
In two years and four months he will ask you to marry him, you'll say yes.23
Before your wedding day you'll find out he has leukemia.24
In less than one hour from the time you find out he has leukemia, he will die in his room. 25
But this is all in the future for you. Live your life well while you still can. 26
And don't worry, that girl Claire, ends up working at Mcdonalds with signs of baldness at age 24. 27
Author notes
Second person actually made it easier to write.
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- The 2nd Perspective by Yeshua.
363 points, ended February 15, 14 entries
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Comments
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very well done! first the negatives... you had a couple of typos...
on line 1: Spelling error: "and you aren't tols 'welcome' by..."
on line 15: Capitalization error: "YOu leave your..."
other than that i thought it was amazing... It was a very unique scenario (especially since i am a guy) but the emotionless fastforward was very well done... Congrats and thank you for the submission into my contest

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Thank you
Thanks so much!! I would have never tried this idea without your contest. I had never even thought about it!! Thanks for reviewing it and telling me the negatives, it helps a lot! Great contest and thanks again.
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