NOTE: I wrote a story called Vampric Blood, which this goes along with. You do not need to read that also. Karma is a vampire, Brent is a human. They're Bf/Gf.1
Snow lightly fell on the ground and danced at our feet. Other shoppers must have been cold, but I had a lack of body heat. I pretended to shiver so people wouldn't become intrigued by my suspicious behavior. Brent - my beloved Brent - held my right hand tight as we made our way down the line of shops and stores. Our pace was slow as we enjoyed each others presence. Listening to Brent's heartbeat, I closed my eyes and enjoyed the serenity. As people ran around us, we just walked slowly and calmly. Finally, we decided to split up and shop for each other.2
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What exactly do you get for a female vampire who has lived for hundreds of years? As I paced up and down the rows of clothes, I searched for a gift for Karma. Unfortunately, saving Christmas shopping for December 24 was not our best choice. I hadn't made very many good choices lately. Falling head over heals for a vampire, having a vampire as a best friend, and standing up for my girlfriend when my dad found out. Smart move, Brent.4
Smelling a sample of perfume, I debated what scent Karma would like.5
"Can I help you?" a cheery salesperson I hadn't even noticed asked.6
"I need a Christmas present for my girlfriend," I responded, "Something mild."7
"You have a sensitive nose?"8
"No," I responded with a laugh, "She does."9
"I've never had a couple who had a woman more sensitive about the scent than the man!" She laughed along.10
"We're not like most people," I admitted.11
After rustling around behind the counter, the salesperson handed me a golden bottle in the shape of a dolphin. It looked promising, until I opened it and took a whiff. Thrusting it back in a hurry, I ran out of the shop with my hand over my mouth in search of the nearest trash can.12
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What do you get for your boyfriend who is forty times younger than you and a species you've never been? I searched the shop for something Brent might like.14
Toy cars?15
Too childish.16
Clothes?17
Too dumb.18
What on Earth should I get him? I'm sure he'd be happy with whatever I decided, but I didn't want to risk it.19
I brought a book to the counter. In big black letters, the front read "How to Banish a Vampire." Brent would get a kick out of that. The book I had chosen was full of baloney. Stakes, sure, but garlic? It's like a hot iron. It'll hurt a lot but won't actually kill unless you try. And a holy cross? Honestly. Humans will fall for anything.20
Bringing it up to the counter, I passed a number of "great deals." When I put the book on the checkout table, I was offered a buy-one-get-one-50% off. Not even free? What kind of store is this?21
"Do you have a BigBucks saver card?" The clerk asked.22
"No," I responded.23
"Do you want one?"24
"No!"25
"How about a buy one get one 50% off?"26
"NO!" I demanded, "I just want the book!"27
"Okay, then how about this great deal on a Beanie-Ba-" The clerk asked, but was soon cut off.28
"Forget this I'm out of here!" I shouted back through clenched teeth. I seriously considered eating him. Maybe not, but it was a good way to ease my mind to tell myself I would.29
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Christmas day came fast. Brent came over at around 10 AM.31
"Hello," he said nervously, "Merry Christmas."32
"Merry Christmas," I responded with the same amount of uneasiness. After some breakfast and talking, we decided to open presents. The aura of nervousness increased tenfold.33
"I'll go first," Brent offered.34
"No no, I will," I responded. We just sat there staring at each other for a minute, until Brent broke the silence with a confession.35
"I didn't get you a present," Brent admitted, "I couldn't find one." A wave of relief washed over me and the burden on my chest dropped.36
"Neither did I!" I admitted. "The salesperson wouldn't leave me alone long enough to buy the present." I heard the sound I had been craving for days. Brent chuckled and pulled me into a hug.37
"You have given me everything I have wanted, Missy," Brent said into my ear, "You have given me yourself."38
"But it's nothing compared to your present," I said, hugging him back.39
"You're wrong,"40
"I don't think I am,"41
We both sat there, still in each others arms, enjoying our best Christmas ever.
Author notes
This is an entry for a new members Christmas contest!
A contest entry
- December New Member Contest by SW Greeters.
450 points, ended January 5, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Do you think I'll win?
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I loved the story! I believe in paragraph 4 you mentioned how Brent fell "head over heals" for a vampire. Just wanted to point out how you spell "heels". Head over heels!
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oops. my bad. thanks for reading it though and remember to read the actual story
I'm currently working on the Valentine's Day special, and i have to say(even if it is my story) that it's the best special i've done so far.
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Thank you very much! =]
I'm still on the first chapter. I think it's really good so far. I'l be sure to comment when i'm done.
It's okay. Don't beat yourself up. X] -
In my opinion, most definately! You don't try too hard (a fault of my own), and the end result is very pleasing. I'm not sure if i'm saying what I mean to say, but, you know. X]
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yep
I get what you're saying. I read some of your stories- you're pretty good also!
BTW sry i didnt recognize your username on the views list of regular VB...
Can NOT believe I didn't recognize it!
I'm so stupid!
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Uber Kawaii! =]
That's absolutely adorable. I love that they have such different personalities, yet they seem to get along so great. (I'm definitely going to read the original.) I'm very surprised that you're only thirteen; your writing is phenomenal! Good work, keep it up! =]
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Oh, thanks!
I've been working on it a while, but this one is actually the first copy! I really want the readers to connect with Brent and Karma, so I work really hard at portraying their emotions and feelings.
Do I really write phenomenally?
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Glad they had a happy xmas
Reminds me of a sight that i see every now and then. At first you hear a squeeking noise behind you, then the smell of overpowering perfume. People around you begin to smile and laugh to themselves and you want to know what it is that you are missing. You stop, look around and there they are squelching towards you, the Goth couple in PVC matching black outfits, mascara, chains and funny purple lipstick. You don't want to laugh, so you turn away and titter to yourself hoping they won't notice.
This story just reminds me of this, the only difference being that the Goth couple are doing a bit of Christmas shopping.
I found it very funny, thanks for posting it as it really made me chuckle.
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Hi
This is a pretty good story. I think it is cute that they went shopping and couldn't find anything for the other. The story somehow seemed to have more of the Christmas spirit.
Thanks for entering the New Members contest. Welcome to Storywrite. Let us know if we may be of assistance.
Andy, greeter
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Gee, here I expected one of them would grab Santa at the end—and they could both celebrate with a Christmas Dinner.
Hi, welcome to Storywrite and thanks for sharing this so realistic shopping trip with us. It sounded so much like what happens to me every time I brave the Malls.
I was hoping that salesperson would end up the boyfriend’s gift of first blood
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You have a great plot, and your visible characters make for easy reading.
Good luck in the contest,
, Geri
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Ahhhh.... This is wonderful and just in the spirit of Christmas! I cringed at the whole buy-one-get-one-50% off thing, I hate it when stores do that!
The characters were sweet and there was a lot of good humor here. I didn't see any errors. Good job! And good luck in the contest.
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