Collaboration (Conclusion)

Hunter and Bruno sit atop of a hill just outside of Fortennio's mansion. It is 11:54 PM and they are preparing to strike. Bruno examines the mansion through the scope of his Dragunov Sniper Riffle while Hunter does his own scouting with his binoculars. "I have five guards at the front gate and I am seeing four at the rear. We have eight guys at the front door. Two guys per guard tower and I'm picking up two more with rifles from the balconies by the pool. The guards are armed with AK47 assault rifles. Possible escape routes are through the garage and out the front door. I would suggest going in through the back, less coverage and it is easier to access Fortennio's room. There is a ladder by the shed next to the pool. I will take out the men on the balconies and guard towers but the gate keepers are too risky of a shot. If anything goes wrong your best exit is out the way you came. Good luck Hunter." says Bruno placing his index finger on the trigger of the rifle. 1

   Hunter stands up and walks over to a large duffel bag. He un-zips it and arms himself with a suppressed MP5, his two silenced Silverballers, nightvision goggles, and a small syringe containing a special conconction that causes death in less than tirty seconds. Hunter carefully climbs down the hill and creeps along the path until he reaches the front gate. Slowly dropping into a crouching position he swiftly dispatches the guards with a quick burst from the MP5. He drags the bodies off to the side and enters through the gate. Hunter gets into a prone position and spots the men on the balconies. "Bruno, take down the men on the balconies now." orders Hunter through his radio. Hunter looks up at the guards just in time to see Bruno drop them with two shots in the head from the rifle. 2

   Crawling to the shed, Hunter grabs the ladder. "Bruno, take out the  tower guards now." instructs Hunter. He waits for about 20 seconds before Bruno reaches him on the radio, "Guard towers aren't a problem anymore." he says. Hunter sets up the ladderer and climbs up onto the roof. He stealthly moves across the roof and peeks into Fortennio's bedroom. Fortennio is sound asleep in his bed. Hunter gently opens the window and climbs into the room. He pulls out the syringe and approaches the Don's bed. He plunges the needle into Fortennio's neck making the poison crawl to his blood. He pulls the needle out and wipes it off with a wash rag from the bathroom and brings it with him, so he doesn't leave evidence. He climbs out of the window and off of the roof. 3

Bruno is waiting in a car outside of the property. Hunter gets in and Bruno speeds off into the night. "Nice work Hunter." compliments Bruno. "Thank you." he replies.4

"Good job Hunter, with Fortennio out our agencies formed a solid aliance, Bruno wants me to tell you that you can call him whenever you want. I'm sending your money now.". Hunter closes his laptop and goes to sleep. 5

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  • cad40324
    December 29, 2008

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    Very Good

    This, like everything else you have, is packed with plot. I like the fast moving action and the choice of words you use to describe some of the things Hunter does. If you put a bit more sensory external details into the piece, I don't think it would detract from the velocity of the plot. Great writing here.