I see now what my error was,1
Giving anything for my small buzz,2
The drugs did more than alter body-warp mind,3
Anger and fear were all her heart could Find,4
I felt the Needle Pierce my Skin,5
I suppose I let the Drugs Win...6
I feel the Toxin Enter my Vein,7
The loss of her's all I did gain8
All of them Go-None shall stay,9
Remaining the same till end of day,10
Her tears Burn-Acid upon her cheak,11
Seeing His Heart-He was Weak,12
She heard a Sound-Heavy metal Dropped,13
Against the Table was his Body Propped,14
Her pistol lay Upon the Floor, Barrel Still hot, Misunderstood what was meant by "This is the last time we fought..."15
He lay dying in his blood-her tears,16
Last heard " I loved you, despite the Fears...",
Author notes
(I know it switches from 1st to 3rd person, it's intentional)
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It was good and compelling. Somewhat confusing at first, but I read it again and understood. Thanks and good luck in my contest.
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Where does this fit?
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really good
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AMzing
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Oops!
Line 15 was meant to be Split,after Hot should be enter, My Bad! -
OH I REMEMBER THIS ONE!! lol I liked it. Too bad we couldn't make a good ending to it. oh well i think it's fine the way it is.
really good imagery i love it this is another fav of mine of yours
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