The mirror reflects what it wants1
Never showing all of the truth2
Just a shard of glass3
Clear in the center4
I want to be a mirror5
Only telling you what I see 6
Never letting you see me7
Hollow to the core8
Clear as crystal 9
Transforming everything I reflect10
Sometimes getting broken in the process11
Will you break me?12
Leave me for someone else to sweep up13
If you do remember what I was14
Just a mirror reflecting what I saw15
Not allowed to reflect myself
A contest entry
- POEMS ONLY! by SilentMoonDance.
150 points, ended June 19, 17 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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what about liiiiike. transparent existance or reflection. i dunno! its good though
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Hmmm: maybe...
Broken Mirror
Mirror of Lies
Break the Lies
Crystal truth is no more.
Idk. Lol, I hope you find a good title. I used to be really good at creating titles. This is very beautiful by the way. I really like it.
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Nice...
I think we all are like mirrors insome way or another, we get broken easily...our spirits, and we sometimes hide from ourselves, but people can see us clearly, like staring into a mirror.
Great job and good luck!
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Title suggestions:
Mirror
Image
Mirror, Mirror
Reflection
Lying Reflection
Awesome poem and great luck in your contest!
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increadible
Your really good at writing poems!!!!!! I like the part:
I want to be a mirror
Only telling you what I see
Never letting you see me
Hollow to the core
Clear as crystal
I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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You are a fantastic writer! I hope to here more from you
-songbird
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You know...a good friend of mine once said "Go look at yourself in the mirror...and tell me what it says." While a mirror appears to just be glass, it could tell us more about ourselves than we thought we knew...Look deeper, you can find yourself in it.
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"Corporeal"
That's what I think you should call it. Or "corporeality". or. . . . . ."incorporeal suffering"
I love the flow of this. It's so sad and touching.
Well Done
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Protection in a Mirror.
I liked your poem very much,the whole idea of being in a mirror and noone seing you makes you feel protected.Nice job.
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Interesting....
A mirror with a conscience or free will, who is the fairest one of all...(I stole that)
Write, write, write, don't care who reads if any or not, but let those thoughts and ideas and emotions and angst well up and out and flow.
I hope to see a longer story from you soon...please advise me when you write it and change your page, don't talk down to yourself, paint us a pretty picture of the you, you are hiding behind.
smiles...
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Thank you I have already begun a short story called flames and have as of yet posted three parts
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the title should be called 'MIRRORS'
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