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Standing there1

Watching time pass me by2

Not giving me a second glance3

Nor a second chance4

Then you're there5

And I wish I could die6

Because this could be my last7

But i find that i cannot speak my part8

Standing there 9

Watching time pass me by10

I realize there is someone11

Standing by my side12

And it's you13

So beautiful you seem14

In the pale light of the stars 15

For I seem to have forgotten 16

Where we truly are17

You are unmatched 18

To say but the least19

In your looks and your grace20

For they aren't found anywhere21

But the features of you face22

You speak like a breeze23

Soft yet firm24

It's beauty invisible25

Yet beauty I see26

When we dance 27

Into the night28

All of my thoughts are gone29

'Cept for those you are on30

My heart no longer slow31

My feelings no longer still32

Your heart on my heart33

For my heart is yours34

Yet it cannot last35

A long awaited silence36

A Painful end37

To what night has brought38

Has brought and has loved39

Standing there40

Watching time pass me by41

You gave me a glance42

You gave me a chance

Author notes

SO... yeah... i wrote this when I was completely smitten by my girlfriend. Gave it to her and she liked it but i still need to know how crappy it really is...

How cheesy is it? =P

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  • WriteGuy
    January 16
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    ..... stop writing about elizabeth. other than that, yah it was cheesy