Sometimes
I hate you
The amount of power you have over me
Is ridiculous
You can cut me deep without
A word
Or a glance
You can say something simple
Or unrelated
And it can make me happy for a week
I love you
And I always will
And you know it
That's where your ridiculous power lies
So sometimes
I hate you
Author notes
This is the product of long pondering and over-analysis. These are my feelings so keep that in mind while being honest. And if you have to make a choice between kindness and honesty, just know that I prefer honesty. (:
(Happy Days)
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i like it
it's got a sense of "emo" whicch i like very much
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With this poem - it's very good, but there's not enough within it to really capture my attention.
Nothing to relate to. You have the emotions down, but as far as wording goes you need to make it a little more unoriginal. Add some objects or scenery in there and you'll have one fine, dandy poem.
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interesting
i liked the sense of a love/hate thing for the person this is "adressed" to
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I think that this poem's really good. It's a typical paradox, which everyone seems to encounter at least once in their lifetime... I think you phrased it well in this poem
Great job
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That just about sums up why I no longer speak to my ex. I mean, I don't love him but he was really charming and also made it perfectly clear that I COULDN'T hurt him because he didn't care. It's a painful feeling.
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I can relate (obviously
). Imagine if it was your father...well I CAN hurt him (in theory...I'm ridiculously careful not to. It's like the child becomes the parent yet again) but it wouldn't change anything.
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WOW
I love this more then almost anything I've ever read. This was amazing and wonderful. I feel this way about my best friend and it is amazing that someone feels the same way and can exspress it like that. It is very nice and well written! I LOVED IT!
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Good poem thing. Good topic choice, very original.
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Thanks. (: Sarcasm?
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Hmm. It's good Bee. It's sad, kind of, but not REALLY sad. And It's kind of cute. Good job though MERRY CHRISTMAS!
KEEP WRITING!!!
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That sums up how I felt when I wrote it...kinda sad but not REALLY sad. It's about my dad.
Merry Christmas back at you! We're on at the same time again (: Have you seen your presents yet? (:
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Wow, this is really good. The emotion out of it was so true, I could feel it. I luffles this work, it's a well written peice. Great job, and keep up the good work! Great, great work!
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This is really good! That being said, you have be careful with free-form poetry that it just becomes sentences that aren't strung together like in prose, but don't flow like poetty. I really like this. I especially like
"You can cut me deep without
A word
Or a glance"
Because who can't relate to that. Beautifully done.
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Good poem. It was deep and I can relate to it. No need to change it, it's great.
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Wow. This shows a lot of emotion in such little words.
I can actually relate to this, with my life.
Good job! :]
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Agh. Story. of. my. life.
Teen romance is wonderful, isn't it? Funny how I was thinking of the same guy this whole time. Thanks for reading my mind. It really is amazing, how quick we are to forfeit such phenomenal power to boys when they are so very dangerous.
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Yeah...to be perfectly honest teen romance sucks. Not that I wouldn't jump at a chance for it. This piece was actually about my dad though.
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