Autumn (description)

Black branches reaching out above the green grass. You can't see much of the grass though, just through places waiting to be filled with golden leaves. One by one they drift off, swirling out of the safety of their protecting homes. Twirling and twisting in the wind, as it plays with them momentarily before dropping them to reacquaint with their siblings.1

The trees rock and groan, their semi-naked limbs dancing to the eerie song of the whistling breeze. Their branches seem to float upwards minutely as each leaf leaves, a wait off its mind. I know it's my imagination, but still the image of children leaving their parents, waving farewell, persists in my mind.2

Their bumpy skin feels hard in my fingers at first, but as I rub them absentmindedly between thumb and index they yield, sinking softly into a smooth warmth, like cloth. The breeze is laden with the taste of new life. It wafts gently into my mouth as I take a deep breath, alighting my senses with a spicy, energetic taste that makes you want to roll on a huge pile of leaves, clutching them close to you.3

Patches of sky could be seen through the sparse foliage, an endless blue abyss. Clouds float across, ruffling like the tops of waves. It's sea on which no ship has ever sailed...4

Red, brown and gold. Dancing an intricate dance to music only they can hear. Speckled skin, parted with delicate arteries branching from the base. Nearby a girl runs through the falling leaves, catching them like rain. Her giggles ring through the small wood, answered by a flash of red as a Robin answers.5

He puffs out his chest, perched on the highest branch while the leaves swirl behind him. They shower him like praises, encouraging him to raise his voice. The newly-made carpet grows deeper, sinking feet down to knees with a crunching noise.6

Yet still they came.

Author notes

Yet still they came. Duh duh duh duuuuuuuuuuuuh. Um... this was random. ?

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  • soirrachd
    January 29

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    very well written lots of personification and imagery i liked it mind you if you look it over you could stop a lot of the run on sentences and even make the words flow together a bit batter other then that it was an amazing job keep up the good work Will


  • Reaver Greeters member
    January 14

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    Couple run ons and many spelling errors, but the descriptions were done wonderfully. I enjoyed your view of all the leaves and the Robin.

    Just needs a good proofread to make it shine.
    Thanks for entering,
    Rian,


  • flowerbee1234
    December 29, 2008

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    Wow, you really explained to me in great detail what fall looked like. You told me exactly all of the five senses. Boy, this contest will be really hard to judge since everyone's so good! Great job, and good luck in the contest.


  • Rose Hathaway
    December 23, 2008

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    Kewl

    once again your descriptions blow my mind. You repeat some of the words in your sentences, which makes it sound a bit strange like Dancing an intricate dance, but what do I know? Don't answer that lol

    beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 1, ending: 3, dialog: 5, characters: 2.