Blaze's World

It was a normal day in Liverpool; I stared out the white window. At my school having the same classes everyday, gosh really why everyday? I looked around the room full of guys. Well, I know I am in an all boy high school, but still can there be just one girl? Well there is Dave, but he freaks me out. Wearing lipgloss on a guy is weird to manhood. All I want is something new to come…1

“Boys, we have a new student today,” Our teacher said to the class and I looked up to see the new kid. My jaw drop to the ground. I looked around the class to see if I was the only guy that thought the new guy was god-made. He was tall at first - that not fair now I am still small - he had dark brown hair but when the sun hit it, it sparkled. Lucky dick; I hate my black hair, it's all gross and stuff...maybe because I forgot to shower yesterday. His green eyes hit my blue ones and my heart went miles per hour. What is wrong with me?2

He smiled and started to talk. “Hello, my name is Jasper.” I laugh a bit; Jasper as in the ghost that funny.3

“What so funny Blaze?” The teacher looks to me with his eyebrow raise to me with question.4

“Nothing sir,” I blush red cause the whole class looked at me, even worse Jasper gave me an look that couldd kill - I think he knows why.5

“Anyways Jasper, take a seat," he smiled at him. Jasper smiled as well and walked around the room to sit down. I look next to me carp empty seat and closed my eyes, hoping that he would not sit next to me. I heard the seat move and opened my eyes; there was Jasper. His green cute eyes moved to my face and his smile came up.6

“Hello,” he said to me; I nodded.7

“Hey,” I tried not to look at him. 8

“How are you?” he started to talk again. I sigh, can’t he tell I don’t want to be friends?9

I moved my head to him and tried to smile.10

“I am great thanks,” I said. Wrong - I felt like shit now, I just wanted the bell to ring.11

“Oi Jasper, don’t talk to that loser,” said Dave over his shoulder.12

I looked at him. “What, I‘m the loser? At lest I don’t wear lip gloss.” Dave turn around and sulk in his lip gloss. 13

Jasper laughed a bit and looked to me, but the bell rang.14

“Yes.” I got up and grabbed my bag and headed to the door, but the teacher stop me.15

“Hey Blaze, can you do something for me?” he asked16

“What is it Sir?” I said in a hurry.17

“Well because you look like a nice lad, can you show Jasper around the school?” he smiled at me. Then Jasper stood behind the teacher smiling.18

Noooooooo! 19

“Sure I will,” I smiled...god help me.20

As Jasper smiled at me as we both left the classroom.21

I quicky pulled my jumper on me and place my hood to clover my face. I didn't want people to see with him.22

He looked over to me but siad nothing.23


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  • BlamedRobin
    December 21, 2008

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    this was too cute. jasper sounds sexii lol . wat harm can come from showing someone around??? lol


  • Demon Buster
    December 19, 2008
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    weird...
    10/10 though


  • Sgs
    December 19, 2008

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    It does need some punctuation fixes, but other than that, it is a great read as always from you. Good job!


  • Oddems.
    December 19, 2008

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    Heh, I shall give you my two POVs, Auntie Tina.

    Friend PR: I loved it!! Ha ha, it's a good storyline and I loved how you made Blaze want to avoid him. Great job!

    Teacher PR: (Heh, joking!) This needs a lot of editing....but other than that, it's a good story. Message me if you want help w/ the editing.

    Those are only two of the hundred PR's I have. Keep writing!

    PR


  • Fallen Ones Soul
    December 19, 2008
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    whoa this is exilent i l0ove it

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