My heart didn't break today.1
From the beginning, I knew it was different.
I never felt this way before
About anyone
The first time I thought that
I felt stupid about how cliche it sounded
But it made me happy.
All of it
Even the stupidity
The feeling
Him.2
He didn't know
I didn't want him to
It probably would have ruined it
Nothing would come out of it
Too many things weren't right
But I didn't truly believe that
For a long time3
When I started to believe it
It wasn't because I wanted too
It was like the truth was infiltrating my brain
Without permission
I fought it for a while
And hung on
But eventually I lost
I think from the beginning
I knew
I would lose.4
My heart didn't break today
But today
I realized
It had been broken
Author notes
Happy Days
Option 3
I turned an old piece I had written into a poem. I actually like it better this way. I have to admit...a lot of my inspiration (in format and phrasing) came from Sonya Sones. If you haven't read her books, go out and get one! (:
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Perty good there.
I enjoyed reading this very much!!! -
Wow
i liked the sort of emo sad quality to it
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congrads you made the finals
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Thanks! (:
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Excellent
Very good. I can relate to this but I don't think I would have been able to put it the way you did. I think you expressed it simply yet excellently. I'm amazed and touched by how stark and realistic this is....
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The ending totally surprised me! I thought the point of the poem was someone saying they loved someone else. But your ending is so much better.
The last stanza is extremely powerful. Leaves the reader remembering it.
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Oh, now that I reread it I can see how you would think that. I'm glad it surprised you (: I wish I could say I planned that.
This was a true story (poem) the only time I ever felt serious about a boy...and he still doesn't know. Or he might. Depends on how sharp he is
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This is quite good
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Thanks for sharing this write with us. I do like it. Flows well. Uses good imagery. And tells a good tale. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Now this....
is better than some of your prose! The last stanza was particularly well-presented, the whole thing of realisation about the broken heart was just as near perfect as you could get! -
Awww this is cute (: I am sorry your heart was broken by someone, and bye the sounds of it, through not noticing you? Someone who couldn't see someone talented and bright needs their heads broke (:
This was amazing. I liked the prose and scene it kind of had set into it, sweet as write (:
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Im inspired!
That was good! That gives me ideas for some poems.INSPIRING!
I love it.Thank u for writing a poem I wish I made
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IM JEALOUS! *CUSS*
MERRY CHRISTMAS! *SANTA*
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This is a beautiful poem. Well written and touching. I really enjoyed reading it and I almost cried! (I am an extremely emotional person). Great job on this poem! Three sets of applause for Mr. Clapping Man!
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I LOVE SONYA SONES!!!! She has the best poem/books. I love her writing style, it's so unique. Anywho, this is really good Bee! I love it. Great job, and i look forward to more pieces from you. Good job
KEEP WRITING!!!
-Melli<33
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