She wore the most beautiful dress that night .. it was white with a pale pink hue .. her sun-spun hair was knotted on the top of her head, revealing her exquisite face ... she had woven delicate pink and white blossoms and diamantes throughout her hair for decoration. She had the highest cheekbones and the most fascinating eyes i had ever looked into .. pale blue .. the streaks of white light and pink would reflect from them, transforming them to a shade of violet under the illumination of the clubs lights, which also made the diamond stud earrings that adorned her ears glitter in the dimmed reflective light, one of the many gifts from an admirer. She was carved from perfection. Her dainty frame was that of a tiny dancer, demure and elegant. Her lips were her draw card though .. any man would melt if they ever had the slightest chance to brush a kiss upon the natural pout that simply beckoned and demanded attention. 1
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It was a cold evening, but it was always warm within the club walls. She had finished her performance for the night. She was the main attraction .. the club singer .. she had the voice of what I could only imagine an Angel would sound like .. she sung with soft, velvet tones as she reclined against the piano .. her voice would range from that of seduction to the most innocent of notes. The sultry veil of light that fell onto her skin, made her glow with affection. I always watched as she would move her way around the crowd. After her performance, she would mingle with the patrons that the club owner would point out to her from behind the bar. And I always remained seated in a darkened corner, watching as she shyly smiled at these gentlemen and she would lower her eyes to the floor as she lifted a hand to her lips and let out a childish giggle. I could see what these men were thinking as they eyed her from head to toe. It made me sick to my core. But she was a woman of virtue and would dismiss their invitations with a gentle wave of the hand and move on to the next circle of admirers to entertain for a few minutes with small conversation and fluttering lashes .. 3
But they didn't know what I knew .. I had slowly put the pieces together over the last year .. I watched as she glided over to my table .. she picked up my drink and took a slow sip as she looked at me underneath those eyes .. those eyes that would send me to the edge of heaven in a heartbeat if I allowed them too .. or see me drowning in an endless pool of violet liquid .. hypnotic .. I looked at the glass as she slowly fingered the edge of a manicured nail around the glass rim, the spirit swirled in the glass with her movements .. a slow rhythmic dance that captured my mind for a moment of intimacy that I needed to tear my heart away from. Hypnotic indeed .. but I was ever careful not to fall under her spell.4
"So...." she drawls .. "are you ready?"5
I pick up my keys from the table and she hooks her arm around mine as we head for the door to collect our jackets .. I help her into her coat, which she pulls snugly around her neck and we are greeted by an icy blast of wind as we exit the club door.6
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Its cold in the car, so I put the heater on as high as it will go ..8
"I have to make a stop on the way to your place Nichole is that okay?"9
She simply sighs with that wave of the hand as if to say 'do as you please'.10
"Its out past Johnston Road by the Old Hollow Woods .. shouldn't take long though .. I promise"..11
She leans over and turns the radio up, her fingers tap on her knee .. I take my eyes off the road for a moment to look at her, she watches the trees through the window .. the night is clear and it is a full moon .. such a beautiful, but cold night .. the wind whistles as we drive down the highway. I find the turn off and proceed up the gravel track ..12
"He sure does live out of the way Nathan", she murmurs.13
I pull up in a small clearing, by the lake .. the frost is lifting off it in a hazed mist ..14
"Where is his place?" she asks as I fumble under the car seat ..15
She is looking out over the lake through her window, unaware that I was waiting for her to meet my gaze ..16
"I've got something for you Nichole" I whisper ..17
She turns and at that moment the moon reflects a silver shine off the blade in my hand .. her eyes widen and she lets out the most god awful piercing scream .. her hands reach for the door handle .. and she pushes it open and stumbles out of the car ..18
"I'll give you a head start".. I yell after her .. "Hard to run in stiletto's on gravel Nichole"...19
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It was dark .. but the moon's milky illumination reflecting from the lake was enough light to see which direction she had run .. straight into the woods, into the thickness of the trees. I stopped momentarily to pick up her coat which she had shed .. I lifted it to my face and breathed in the exquisite perfume of Nichole .. I must admit .. I was bewitched by this woman .. she was so perfect .. but even perfection has its flaws .. and she had a major one. My thoughts were distracted by the sound of a stick breaking in the distance .. I looked up to see a streak of white..21
"Nichole" .. I whispered under my breath.22
I slowly headed in the direction of the movement .. no need to rush .. the night was mine, and so was Nichole. 23
Adrenaline was coursing through me in waves and I felt like an animal on the prowl, which, in a way, I suppose I was. I could hear her shallow breath as she ran, I could hear her feet on the ground… and I knew that she wasn’t far away. Nobody would come here tonight… nobody would interrupt… the perfect place for a perfect lady. 24
The night itself was wonderfully refreshing, if I breathed in deeply I could smell the rain of the previous day, the dampness of the grass … even the trees. The breeze was just so … not too cold… and not too warm either. It was enough to bring me her whimpers and her scent, but not enough to take her mine. 25
So I followed … not once bothering to pick up my pace, making sure not to lose the correct direction. I was born for this… born for the hunt… isn’t it ironic how we find our true talents at the most unexpected of times? But that thought aside, Nichole was waiting for me. 26
She had her foot stuck; I saw that as soon as I moved through another set of bushes and into a small sort of clearing… her shoe, unsurprisingly, was trapped between the roots of one of the trees. I smiled, she screamed … perfect. 27
I pounced… 28
"You're too perfect to live Nichole" I whispered as she struggled under my body, like a worm trying to edge its way out of a glass jar .. it wasn't ever going to happen. I looked into her eyes for a moment .. so pale .. so goddamn beautiful .. too perfect.29
"Tell me Nichole .. tell me why?" I commanded.30
"Why what .. you're a fucking lunatic Nathan .. get off me!"31
I put my cheek to hers, and I whispered,32
"Why did you murder him?"33
I reached down and ripped her dress up around to her hips and tried to pull her panties down .. but her thighs were clenched together ..34
"Jesus Nichole .. "35
I edged down a little ..36
I didn't see her struggling to reach for the rock, but she did and she managed to pick it up, while I was so foolishly trying to violate her .. she hit me over the head and although it didn't knock me out, I felt stunned and I could feel a warm trickle of blood roll down my forehead over my eye and down my cheek. My body felt heavy and I slumped onto her .. unable to lift myself .. she struck me again. I could feel her struggling underneath me, trying to push my weight off her .. but I was too heavy, and she was weak, her tiny frame was getting crushed beneath me.37
"Get off me you fucker," she screamed. Adrenalin must have kicked in, because she managed to roll me off her petite body. 38
I couldn't see properly .. it was as though she was costumed in a clear mist and everything blurred into a twisted distortion of grey. My head was thumping and the blood from my wound, was pouring in a steady trickle now. The moon looked hollow for a moment through the naked branches of the trees, and the wind whistled into my wound.39
"why?" I whispered, through laboured breath.40
"I fucking loved you Nathan .. I killed him so I could be with you .. he would never have let me leave otherwise .. but you're so goddamn aloof that there was no way I could ever tell you .. you fucking fool ... you've ruined everything ... EVERYTHING" she was crying now uncontrollably.41
"I bet you never knew he used to beat me .. no .. you wouldn't have known that, how could you possibly know .. he used to use things on me so no marks would be left .. he raped me whenever it suited him and he tried to strangle me too .. ever wonder why I wore a scarf in the middle of summer for 3 weeks straight?"42
I wasn't listening anymore .. my whole world disintegrated the moment she said 'I fucking loved you Nathan' .. 43
"You're too perfect to live Nichole," I whispered, "what are you doing?" 44
She was unbuckling her stiletto's, one of the heels was broken .. then I saw her pick up the knife .. my skull felt like it was going to implode, the pain was unbearable.45
"I loved you," she whispered between sobs as she moved around behind me .. I felt her fingers run through my hair, then I felt her hand as she grabbed a clump of hair and yanked my head back ..46
"I loved you Nathan" she screamed as she lifted the knife and with one deep slice along my throat .. I was gone.47
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"I killed your brother you fool .. did you think I wouldn't be able to kill you? .. and you ruined my goddamn fucking dress" she muttered to herself as she pushed my body down into the leaves.49
Once again, I watch her from the sidelines, in the darkness as I had done so many times in that club. She rummages through my pockets and removes my car keys and as she stumbles through the forest in bare feet, her stiletto's lying broken next to my hand, I listen as the leaves crackle under her feet as she fights through the darkness to find the right key for the car .. I watch as her eyes widen and her pupils dilate when she hears movement coming from the thickness of the scrub behind her .. she begins to run out into the clearing and to the car door. She fumbles with the key trying to fit it into the lock, but its the wrong key. She turns for a moment to see where the movement is coming from, but it is silent in the woods apart from the odd sound of a bird calling in the distance .. she thinks it is me, that I had somehow miraculously survived the attack, even though she almost sliced through bone when she slit my throat .. my soul had scattered through my lips on impact of the blade to my flesh. I smile as I see her drop the keys through shaking hands in terror as she hears the leaves getting crushed underfoot .. I smile because I can see it.50
I grin when I see the gigantic creature put its mighty arms around her small frame and begins to crush her as she screams in torment. Its claws slice through her chest and her lungs as it rips the flesh from her arms with its teeth .. 51
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And then I am snapped back .. through a vortex of pale, twisted light, to a white door-less room, that contains nothing except myself .. and I wait .. it takes a little longer for her to join me up here because her soul is traumatised from the bear attack .. but she does .. and when she does we are both as we were .. perfect .. we embrace and we kiss .. there is a tear in her eye .. she whispers that she loves me and that she is so sorry .. I whisper back that I love her .. I take both her hands in mine and i look into those pale blue eyes and I am at the edge of heaven if only for a moment .. and we embrace and she whispers in my ear,53
"Is this ever going to stop Nathan?" ... to which I reply..54
"I think this is hell .. and this is our few moments of heaven .. this is our punishment Nichole .. we have learned to love each other now .. too late .. this is eternal hell .. for what we did to each other, I hope of returning to this room and finding a door .. but .. lets just enjoy each other now until we have to ...................."55
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She wore the most beautiful dress that night .. it was white with a pale pink hue .. her sun-spun hair was knotted on the top of her head, revealing her exquisite face ... she had woven delicate pink and white blossoms and diamantes throughout her hair for decoration. She had the highest cheekbones and the most fascinating eyes i had ever looked into .. pale blue .. the streaks of white light and pink would reflect from them, transforming them to a shade of violet under the illumination of the clubs lights, which also made the diamond stud earrings that adorned her ears glitter in the dimmed reflective light, one of the many gifts from an admirer. She was carved from perfection. Her dainty frame was that of a tiny dancer, demure and elegant. Her lips were her draw card though .. any man would melt if they ever had the slightest chance to brush a kiss upon the natural pout that simply beckoned and demanded attention ..........................57
© Aimee Lee 200558
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Author notes
Thanks for reading .. okay for those of you who are left a little confused by the ending .. because I know there will be a couple of you 
.. its kinda like groundhog day only with a nightmare element lol .. so basically Nichole and Nathan have to relive that moment over and over and over again eternally as their punishment in the afterlife .. that is their hell .. thanks again for reading 
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oh my f.u.c.k.i.n.g. god.... this is ur bestest one yet! wow girl....holy shit is all i can say
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Aimee, hun, this was a wonderful story dear! very well done! I loved reading this one!
Angel
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Thankyou Chocolate King
I'm really glad you enjoyed the read 
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most excellent
I really loved the drama of this. It wasn't really scary but that doesn't matter to me. It's awesome how you used the groundhog-day style repeating day, but you made it much more dramatic. Great write.
(By the way, I loved groundhog day )
Keep it up,
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Thankyou for the awesome comment Jinxgirl .. I'm really glad you enjoyed the read
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wow. that ending was such a nice touch. this was so well done, very descriptive and interesting, a very very nice write. scary too. thanks for entering, good luck in my contest!
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Thankyou for the applause and the beautiful comment Lady anairO .. very much appreciated hun .. and lol at the thunder
.. I'm the same .. big hugs
~Aimee
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A heart-taking adventure to a tragic love story.
I love the way you described that beautiful Nicole, as a legendary beauty.
An intense passionating love grows between two caracters, lovely!!!
Some weird details...
Awesome!!!
Lady anairO who needs to go cuz there is thunder and she doesnt wanna take any risks
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Thankyou for the applause and the beautiful comment beautifulmemory .. i'm glad you enjoyed it hun
~Aimee
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Awesome
In shock right now, I loved how you repeated the end....twisted and dark and all of it beautifully crafted -
Thankyou for the applause and the awesome comment WickedNeverland .. very much appreciated hun big hugs
~Aimee
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holy fucking shit, you just blew my mind! *laughs* this was amazing, beautiful descriptions, wonderful veiw points, lovely and twisted. Poetry warped into hell, perfection at its most horrible, this story was...just that. perfection at its most.
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Thankyou hurtmedeeply for the amazing comment hun .. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it .. you've made my day with your words .. big hugs
~Aimee
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oh and the line,"you ruined my goddamn dress" was great too. lol
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breathtaking
OMG!!! this was brillant!!i cant even put into words how great this was...omg..i am still in awe.lol you did a terriffic job. this was so great and marvelous and magnificent and sensational and awesome and beatuiful and omg..this is the best poem i have ever ever ever ever read in my entire life.lol you did a GREAT job on this...i loved it so much. you truly are a great writer and you should be very satisified with what you came up with. i dont think any one could have done any better than you just did...i think you proved the fact that people often do stupid things for love...you just showed that in this poem. i liked how you set this in story form. and how you portrayed every moment, every feeling, and every thought. i liked how nichole was a singer in a club, and nathan was as a friend to her. together they created such an image. i could picture everything as i was reading this poem. and coming up with the idea of living in eternal hell was just great!!! you are such a great writer!!! i dont know how anyone could write something like this..i mean this was incredible. you are most definitley a favorite now. lol AWESOME JOB!!! *hurtmedeeply* -
Thankyou for the applause and awesome comment pearjazzy ... very much appreciated
~Aimee
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WOw!
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Thankyou Muse for the applause and awesome comment hun .. I'm glad you enjoyed it .. thanks again .. big hugs
~Aimee
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This is absolutely brilliant, really I mean it - I thought it was superbly written and divinely inventive. I certainly wasn't expecting it to turn out the way it did, I adore stories with such wonderful twists.
The first part was beautifully written, stunning imagery and nearing the end it got progressively darker like a twisted faerie story. Scrumptious very well done indeed.
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Thankyou for the applause and the awesome comment Fallen .. glad you enjoyed it hun .. hehe
.. big hugs and 
~Aimee
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wow
i am utterly speechless..jsut when i thnk u have reached your highest with your ink...you go one step further....you continue to surpass yoursdelf each and every time...tyhis was so goddamn intense..the idea of a nightmare groundhog day is phenominal...as is the imagery.....i loved how even betwen all the sadness and pain a twisted sickly humour in the form of
"and u ruined my goddamn fukin dress" that was legendary hahah! this was incredible aimee...truly
fallen
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Thankyou Nightwish girl for the applause and the beautiful comment hun .. glad you liked it
~Aimee
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Great write I'll be sure to read more by you. Very describitive and described clearly I especailly loved the ending!
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Thankyou silverwing for the applause and beautiful comment hun .. glad you enjoyed it big hugs
~Aimee
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Perfect and descriptive, it flowed like the blood you described so clearly, dark and deadly with a twisted ending! Perfect! lotsa love from,
silverwing
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Thankyou for the applause and fantastic comment Floating Element .. glad you enjoyed it hun .. I had lots of fun writing it .. thanks again
~Aimee
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Oh this is one of the most fantastic stories I'v ever read on here, I loved the twist at the end, it was as perfect as the girl. You have a amazing talent just amazing. I could picture every last bit of this story and I was captivated from beginning to end. Off to my favs with you.
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Thankyou Katy for the applause and beautiful comment .. i'm really glad you enjoyed the read hun big hugs
~Aimee
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Thankyou mommytoele for the applause and awesome comment hun .. glad you enjoyed it
~Aimee
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Must admit it took me ages to read the whole lot! But it was worth my time reading it. Such a detailed but perfect story. I enjoyed reading a story for once as i don't normally read stories. Big hugs
Katy
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This was great! =) =) =)
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Thankyou Evalinka for the applause and the awesome comment hun .. very much appreciated .. i'm really glad you enjoyed it hun .. big hugs to you
~Aimee
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This was a great write! I read Part 1 and it left me thinking for one whole day but I had never expected this!! The end fits in well, it is ingenious and very original. I loved the description of the hunting... the woods, the darkness... the atmosphere you created was very intense, awesome!!
Evalinka
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Thankyou tears of an angel for the beautiful comment and applause .. glad you enjoyed it hun .. big hugs to you
~Aimee
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this was such a great story! i really loved the detail in it. i often injoy reading what you write and again you surpirized me with your amazing talent. i hope you go far with your writing not only through this web site, but farther to touch even more souls with your writing.
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Thankyou for the applause and the beautiful comment Summer Kiss .. I'm glad you enjoyed the read hun big hugs
~Aimee
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Great story hun! I really enjoyed it again! It gave me chills so that a good thing!
~Summer Kiss~
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Thankyou Timothy for the applause and beautiful comment .. big hugs .. glad you enjoyed the read hun
~Aimee
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Thankyou s p a r k l e Xx for the beautiful comment and applause hun .. glad you enjoyed it .. big hugs
~Aimee
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Thankyou for the beautiful comment and applause lolo .. i'm glad you like it hun .. thanks so much hun
~Aimee
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wow,this was an amazing story. i could feel the emotions and i could see everything taking place. you include just the right amount of detail to let your readers know what is there, without using too much detail and boring your readers. very good work,one of your best i'd say.
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Excellent!
You can do it all I see
Stories and poetry
Wow! I love the way you pen
And I thank you for sharing my friend
I applaud this, well done indeed!
-Timothy
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The descriptions of Nichoel had me captivated from the beggining, I couldn't stop reading. This was right along my path because I love hearing about pretty hypnotizing girls, and the one person that can see straight through them.
This story was beautiful. Just beautiful. Great job.
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Aime,I love this one! I'm speechless after reading this one my dear...
Angel
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wow!!!! you are an amazing poet... AND an amazing author.. I am an ok poet in my eyes, but... i am much better at writing storys... amazing work! I do not often say that when it comes to a story (i'm picky when it comes to storys) but this story, it was wonderful! keep it up!
-lolo
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Thankyou Raven hun for the applause and beautiful comment hun .. big hugs to you
~Aimee
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hey!i like this!wut an awsome end!good idea for a punishment!i realy love this story!
~raven
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