I don't understand you,1
Or the way you are.2
The way you think, 3
about everything.4
The way you can be so happy,5
and then suddenly you're not.6
The way you lie and then apologize,7
like you're affraid to hurt people,8
even though everyone else does.9
The way you don't want to be hated,10
because you don't want to hate.11
The way you play with peoples minds,12
just to test out your own.13
The way you try to guess what people think,14
so you're ready for whatever happens.15
The way you want so much from life,16
when you're happy with whatever you get.17
The way you want everyone else to be happy,18
even if you're not.19
The way you never want to impose on anyone,20
because you're not a people person.21
The way you feel like you don't fit in,22
because no one seems to notice you trying.23
The way you try so hard to understand everything,24
when you know it's impossible to understand anything,25
even yourself.
Author notes
Sort of a poem, sort of a story.
Posted it here anyway.
Comments
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omg that is so good
it had so much emotion
i felt like crying
anyway i loveed it
well done
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Wow.
That cut straight to my heart O.O I'm gonna cry or something, lol! ^^"
I don't want to assume that the world revolves around me, but that seemed almost as if... I dunno. It just seemed almost as if it were written about me ^^" Especially those last few lines.
Maybe I'm too blinded by that pin-point accuracy you seem to have on my mind, even if this isn't actually about me, but I find this poem really amazing. It seems really beautiful to me, because even though you gave it the title, 'I don't understand you', you seem to understand this person pretty freaking well.
On the technical side of things... I love the way the lines get gradually longer until the last line, as if the narrator is getting more and more into the train of thought as they go and then makes the final point at the end. And I love the contradictions, because even thought they're contradictions, they makes sense to me
Well, there's my opinion xD A really beautiful piece of writing. Like I said-- it jabbed straight into my heart and left me stunned
Eph
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Good!
I understand what you're saying it sounds like this person has low self esteem problems and is always happy because she thinks she will make lots of friends that way, the apology thing is because she doesn't want too lost that friend.
Very understanding well done I enjoyed reading it.
Xoxo Serebear.
beginning: 2, language: 2, plot: 2, ending: 2, dialog: 2, characters: 2.
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