“Wake up, please.” I said in a hushed tone, nudging my fiance's lifeless body, or what was left it. There was hardly anything to him, bits and pieces scattered here and there. Blood was everywhere; all over him (if you could even call what was left his body), the concrete floor, me, and my new emerald-green floor length dress. My legs, clammy with blood, stuck to the hard icy floor. I glanced around me, and up at the werewolves. We were in an old warehouse, of some sort. It was really run down; there was no proof of electricity, stacks of wood lay in a few corners, and there was a gaping hole in one of the walls, behind the creatures, which were staring down at me with a glint of hunger in each of their eyes. 1
“He’s gone now, my love. I’m terribly sorry, but it’s your time now. You’ll –“ There was some sort of a similarity to his voice, and if it had been any other time or situation I’d call him a familiar stranger. I could also hear the strong Scottish accent in his voice. That much was clear.2
“You can’t kill me too! Someone’s going to come looking for us, we can’t just disappear like this!!!” I interrupted the big furry creature, shrieking at the one in the center. He seemed like the leader of all three. 3
“No, no.” Pause. “No.” It chuckled in a way a dog might, in spite of everything. I stared back in almost-complete horror.4
“You won’t die, of course.” He’d said it as if it was the most obvious thing in the world. “Your beauty amuses me, so you’ll live.”5
I thought of what it would be like, to be one of them. Super-natural furry beasts, though now the idea of werewolves and vampires and zombies didn’t seem too far off. I couldn’t handle the thought of being a heartless killer, feeding on helpless humans. It was beyond repulsive. 6
His blood-matted fur shrunk, along with his body. Now, instead of a big beast of a thing, a man stood before me. His hair was dark brown and slightly long, but was pulled back into a pony tale. His face was strikingly beautiful, along with the rest of his body; high cheekbones, a strong jaw line, and dark prickly hairs lined his jaw. He wore shapeless white cotton pants that I hadn’t noticed when he was in ‘werewolf form’. I could see how tan he was, the moonlight almost making him glisten. 7
He looked strong, and sure of himself. He took a few steps closer to me, and lent his hand. I just sat there, next to my once almost-husband. I gazed up my fiance's cold-blooded killer, and then glanced back at my fiancé. He’d been ripped to shreds. I couldn’t even recognize him to be human at all, lying next to me. He was sprawled across the floor, like a bug on a windshield. 8
Maybe you’re wondering how I ever stumbled upon this situation. I’ll have to take you back three hours.9
Author notes
xXMetroHollywoodXx, option number three. i wrote this for your contest but accidently uploaded before i could have entered it into ur contest! ugh. sorry.
I just recently rewrote this, today. I hope you like it, or don't. Doesn't really matter to me. Should I continue?
A contest entry
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Great! Stupendous! Now, post the Zombie Story. You're only making me hungry for more terror, horror, and blood curdling excitement. Now see what you have done! Every whimical shadow in the house will manifest itself into a menacing phantom to torment me with teeth nashing, devil snorting fear! In all honesty, I feel you have a great talent and keep developing and cultivating your craft. Best of luck and we all look forward to more stories! -
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i like your style!!
The beginning brought me in:
how she was almost begging for him to awaken though he wouldn't. or couldn't actually.
The middle was extrodinary:
how you explained what happened and the werewolves. i loved how she explained the 'leader.' how he looked and showed interest, him and herself.
the ending was funny
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"Maybe you’re wondering how I ever stumbled upon this situation. I’ll have to take you back three hours."
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Thanks so much(: I really appreciate the positive comments.
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WOW
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Did you even read it?
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I loved the story. Write alot more
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Thanks(: For reading, and commenting. have fun.
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To tell you the truth, I love this idea...
Yes, that's what I said
Normally I'm not into werewolves and the like, but you make it interesting...
There are a few things I noticed that I will talk to you later about, but for the most part, I loved it
You should write more to this, as well as the cat man story. THAT is one helluva plot... That one is my fave so far
But like I mentioned before, this one has a few things I'd fix, but it's good.
The werewolf man sounds hot! lol..
That ALWAYS makes things interesting
ttyl tonight!!
Love Seana
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This is quite a well written story, Melli. I think you have a definite eye and mind for writing such wonderful stories... I can't believe the grades you said you got at school. This is way above average writing... and I hope to read more of your stuff soon, too.
Keep up the great work and don't stop writing until you feel the need is there. I love it and so do many others, so there is not a single reason to stop writing with your beautiful, talented mind.
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Wow.
Those are some heavy compliments, and thank you very much. I really appreciate it, and thanks for reading and commenting and such. (and liking it!Ha.) I rewrote this not too long ago, and I think it came together pretty well. Maybe i'll continue, I'm not for sure. Thanks, again! Have a nice day
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I seem to have forgotten the applause...
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Exactly what I think...here goes. I think you jumped right into this story and pulled me in with you. It is engrossing and attention grabbing. It will be very interesting to see where you take it if you decided to continue. Marvellously done.
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Thanks so much, for reading, commenting, and liking it. Haha, but really. Yeah, I rewrote this a few days back, and I think it came together fairly well. I'll try to continue soon, though I'm not sure where the story will go. Thank you, again.
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ooooOOOOOooo. Hehe I like it. I want more really super fast!! (= There was one spelling typo "My legs, clammy with bloody," should be just "blood" but otherwise perfect! (: DEFINITELY CONTINUE!!!
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Thanks for reeading bee! I'm quite glad you liked it, and I'll change that error fairly soon. Though, I probably won't continue for awhile, sadly. I had already wrote this, I just basically rewrote it last night and added more details. Mmhm.
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