Loser

He feels not, heart shadow of night,1

She's moved on, fell in love.2

He knows he should flee, Full of fright,3

He misses his little dove.4

It was his mistake that cost his life,5

He fucked up, had to leave.6

He had a girl, sure to be his wife,7

Both their hearts he did cleave.8

Now he misses his cat-like friend,9

Both miss the other, Not waiting to return.10

Know eventually their pain will end,11

Not forever hearts shall burn.12

He knows he is weak, does not suffer much,13

Others have more pain, stronger then he.14

No longer, His feelings, people will touch,15

Any come close, he shall flee.16

How can you love when you don't love yourself?17

Does as he wants, ignores others,18

Can't take more, heart on a shelf,19

Now for only Sisters and Brothers...

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Kinda Sucks, but whatever.

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  • FantasyWorld65
    December 28, 2008
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    AWESOME!

    WOW this is my favorite one so far!! Can't wait to read more lol. You're awesome at this Kevin, I is so jealous lol. Beautiful piece, I really enjoyed this one, cause in truth I was like that once but thankfully I met someone who saved me. Good one! i really love it!


  • CommanderCadaver
    December 20, 2008

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    X_O

    I know who this is about.. I'll message you about that later...
    I'm not sure how to spell her name.. but the cat thing gave it away..

    I know theres a z in it.

    Anyways.. It was really nice <33





  • asthray.heart
    December 15, 2008
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    Interesting. Needed to rhyme more and the ending coulda made more sense but good all together.


  • TyShade
    December 14, 2008
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    Wow, very good. the rhyme scheme was pretty on the whole time. Very, very good.