He stood infront of me, throwing his arms out in a sign of protection. It puzzled me, we loathed each other, or was it just me. His dull eyes narrowed onto the beast of a man that stood before us. I felt my consciousness drip away like the blood that leaked out of my wounds. I looked back at me as if he was the one in pain, I saw, he'd take a bullet for me. My thoughts and eyes had decieved me.
A contest entry
- Starting Paragraphs by LiveLoveJabberwocky.
175 points, ended December 25, 2008, 26 entries
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Comments
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That was amazing! Very, very good. I loved "I felt my consciousness drip away like the blood that leaked out of my wounds." An awesome piece. Great job and thank you for entering my contest!
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thanks :L
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A very interesting paragraph. There were a few spelling and grammer mistakes, such as writing 'i' instead of 'I', but they are small things I'm sure you can find.
It was intriging, and definitely made me want to know more. Good luck in the contest!
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yeah it was late and i was just writing it quickly.
thanks
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