Clickidy-Clack

Good night my son1

My father did say2

Just wait for tommorow3

It'll Be Christmas Day4

Snow are flakes falling 5

in a white blanket they lay6

anxious for the next day7

for sow angels to be made8

I can wait for morning9

to wake up in the grey10

To scurry down the stairs11

And see what Santa gave12

Stocking over the fire13

the cookies that we have made14

Awaiting for to be eaten15

and taken away16

On the roof I hear a sound17

and an old man say18

"Merry Christmas Children19

lets see whats in my sley"20

Than I hear a Clickidy-Clack21

As the aold man made his way22

down the stone chiminy23

without a moment of delay24

"I think that Johnny will 25

simply love to play26

with this little toy i've brought27

to him at midnight on this day"28

A smile grew on my face29

as the sley drifted away30

and i hweard a faint voice say31

Merry Christmas to all 32

and Happy Christmas Day33

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  • trekkergirl
    December 19, 2008

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    well this could have been better if you had re-read it. I found several errors... spelling and just the wrong word... sley I believe should have been sleigh. And hweard should have been heard. Need to go back and check that. Not that I am perfect and I do have spelling errors here or there... however, it is always good to go back and re-read it and use spell check.

    As to the poem... I think you had a good one going. I liked the story itself very much... even with all the errors.

    Thought that the background went well with it too.

    thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • Firestar-
    December 11, 2008
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    Nice story.