The little light that still shone between the trees darkened, and I quickened my pace. I didn't want to be late for dinner three times in a row. 1
Walking through the woods again reminded me of when I was little. My sisters and I loved to play tag in the back yard. A specific time that I remembered was when my oldest sister, Stephenie, was "it", I had ran away faster than ever, screaming, (and laughing in spite of myself). In my excitement, I ran into a branch which had poked me in the eye. Now this may not seem like a big deal, but being only four, I fell down and starting bawling, which I tended to do a lot. And of course Marley would always run over and...2
I turned my head, as if looking away helped me avoid the unwanted thoughts that had just come rushing into my head. Closing my eyes doesn't block the unwanted pictures either. But maybe those pictures weren't unwanted. In some sense I still wanted to remember. If only. I'd been saying those words to myself a lot lately.3
A sharp branch poked me in the eye, forcing me back into reality. Part of me waited for that strong and sudden pain that is sure to come. And part of me is not surprised when it doesn't. Many things have changed since I was four.4
I check the old cardboard box to make sure nothing fell out. Pictures, trophies, paintings, they were all in there. I reach in and stroke the well used fur on the small teddy bear. Theodore isn't in the best shape, some might even call him grotesque. His left eye is struggling to hold on by only a thread, and the dog had his left ear for lunch two years ago.5
Around his neck a small silver locket dangles. I resist the temptation to open it and thrust the bear back into the box. Irritated. 6
Looking up I'm surprised that I'm already here. The rivers rushing water made the setting serene, it doesn't feel right.7
I meant to gently place the box in the water. But in my distress I threw it, the items all falling out of the box midair, all landing in the river. Scattered, the current pulled them away until they were out of sight. 8
I couldn't take it anymore.9
I ran.
Author notes
this is option #4
A contest entry
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Comments
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Interesting write full of great detail and emotions. I felt sadness I don't know if you lost an older sibling in this story or perhaps a parent. Not sure. But the story is well written. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering into this contest.
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I really really your loved story! It was so descriptive but sad! It had lots of detail and I loved how it went back to when she was a little girl. And it made it so understanding. It was like I was there and seeing it happen! It was so short but told so much. It was like I was there because it like cut in at the beginning like you were there and it was happening as it always did.
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thanx so much!
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Wow... It made me cry.
Dunno how but it did. Beautiful.
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First of all your icon is uh-MAZING!! second this is a cool story and yeah I liked it
*KT*
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thanks, and even as retarted as pb and jamie sounds, its grown on me, i think i might keep it
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lol. Yeah I like your name but I don't get the Jamie part. But that's okay its still an awesome name.
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its competely ramdom, i didnt mean to set it as my name at all, but i dont want to change cause i agree with u, my icon is awsome
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*blinks*
A very itneresting ending but I love it. I love the title and your description the whole time.
The mood in the atmosphere is so realistic!
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thanks so much!
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