Forgetting all the sadness1
Forgeting all the pain2
Just wondering on why you play this game3
The definition of normal4
Is to hard to find5
Within these letters of heart of mine6
You bleed your life out 7
And leave all alone8
Now me and you will never go home
Author notes
All I could come up with with all of my feelings.
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Awesome job kid..
I'm impressed..
Very short, sweet and to the point as they say <33
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I will bleed with you...until the blood is all gone...(I know really gothish sounding it's so good it's freaking scary)
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It was worded beutifully and it had a nice flow to it. Good job!
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An emotional poem filled with sadness.
Although the poetry flows well and has strong imagery, it is marred slightly by spelling mistakes as follows:
lines 1 and 2: forgeting = forgetting
line 4: deffinition = definition
Nonetheless a well written poem of sad emotion but with solid imagery and good flow.
Lawrie
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