The teenager woke up early in the morning. He reahed to the side of his bed and turned his alarm off.1
He then drew his legs from beneath the covers and placed them down onto the hard floor. A brown large dog which was sat by the door asleep as if gaurding it, opened one eye. The dog then jumped onto the teenagers knee and started furousiosly lick his face. 2
" Calm down scooby" he cried and immediatly the dog stopped licking him. " Lets go get breakfast. Faster than light the dog jumped off the bed and waited by the door. The boy jumped from the bed revealing his flower pattern p.js. 3
As he shut the white door, it revealed the name of the boy which was bluetaked onto a sign on the door: Shaggy.4
He walked down the stairs slowly. He looked out the window as if checkin for anyone, anything. He then walked into the kitchen and fixed breakfast.5
A bacon butty, sausage bap, hah browns, waffles with golden syrup, salad, hot chocolate and orange juice. Scooby licked his lips ravounosly. He was obviously hungry.6
"Your always hungry scooby old pal" shaggy said as he cut him a slice of bacon butty.7
The breakfast was fantastic, delicious and filling.
A contest entry
- Movie Characters... by Dovina.
250 points, ended December 16, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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sorry
i have been down with the flu all week and unable to finish it!
*cough cough*
thanks for the bronze and corrections
hope your contest went well -
I really do love Scooby-Doo and Shaggy.
First off, when you came towards the end of the story, you started lacking in your punctuation. Like "Scooby old pal," Scooby should have been capitalized, then a comma after pal before the quotation marks, and then capitalize Shaggy.
Also, you should have used your spell check, because "reached" in paragraph one was misspelled, and then in paragraph 6, ravounosly should be ravenously.
This doesn't seem like a full story. I gave you time to finish, but it doesn't seem to me like it is.
thanks for your entry -
Just a reminder, that since the contest ended on the 9th, you have until the 14th to complete this, or else I will judge as is. Thanks!
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Good. I'm such a freak that I must say, remember to caps on Scooby and Shaggy. I remember watching this when I was younger. Haha
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