In The Castle

I was inside my castle again.  It seemed that Dorian had control over everything now, even me. Three guards were to watch me during the day and one at night. Although They were outside my door I always felt as though I was being watched.1

Peri came to see me as soon as he heard of my return into the castle. He came into the room and gave me a huge hug immediately. I began to cry in his arms not knowing exactly why, it might have been that I missed him so much he had always been a father to me. 2

" It is not your fault. He said reading my thoughts. I know that you blame yourself but this was going to happen no matter what. You are the bravest girl I know." Said Peri smiling at me and making me feel more calm.3

" I just feel so awful. What can I do now to help them. It shall be told in stories and ballads the tale of the war started by me, and it will continue to be told even after I am dead and gone." I said beginning to cry again.4

" There will be a time for crying later Eve. Right now you must be strong for what is to come. I don't know how long it will take but it will come soon and I don't know what to do to stop it." Peri gazed at me his eyes starting to tear.5

" What is wrong Peri. Surely it is nothing worse then this war? Is it?" I said then he stood up and walked toward the window.6

" I think you know Eve that I am a great magician and can read the stars.(I nodded). Well Eve the truth is Dorian. With all his power in the world also wishes of it that you become his bride." Peri began to looked even more sad.7

" Wha..... What! Peri you are lying to me. Or the stars are placed wrong. No! No! I will never, I would rather die then become that mans wife! I would go into a sea of sharks rather then live with him. Please Peri tell me you are wrong! Please!" I was scared, shocked, angry, sad and nervous all at the same time.8

" You know I cannot lie to you. He will marry you I don't know when but we have to think of something." Peri then twitched as two guards entered the room both with large axes followed by Dorian.9

" Peri I believe that you have manipulated the kings daughter long enough! Your black magic and evil poisonous advice shall be stopped! You have by the kings command been sentenced to DEATH!" Dorian yelled at Peri.10

" No, not this time Dorian! You cannot lie again you know Peri is not of black magic and he has forever shown us loyalty! If you kill him then I shall throw myself from this tower and be dead upon the castle grounds!" I yelled back at Dorian.11

" I shall go with you may the axe that chops my head be clean from sin in taking my life." Peri said, I stood in shock not saying a word.12

Dorian and the men took Peri and I still stood there with nothing but a wide open mouth. I then yelled out to him that I loved him and would miss him with all my heart. Then I put my head on my pillow and cried. From outside I heard the axe drop. I then screamed in pain and cried myself into a death like sleep!13

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  • StrangerInThisWorld
    June 18, 2005
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    this is really great.
    you capture the essence of a stubborn and courageous princess magnificently!! How she loves the magician who was killed! keep it up ( I don't like wizards because it's harder to distinguish whether they are sorcerers or not, but magicians and Gandalf are exceptions)

    Edited on Jun 18, 3:56 p.m. because ''.


  • ayten
    May 5, 2005
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    I just read MY JOURNEY and i found it absolutly brilliant. i loved the way it flowed. Very cool the way your main character is a woman. It was like a dream. the story is really well written.

  • Bornhald
    May 4, 2005
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    Superbly written!

    Wow, this is an interesting series. I love mideval life and all and you've done a good job so far showing the different classes in your society. It is sad that Peri died, but I can't wait to see where you take this. I was always very hesitant about killing off main characters, especially early on. So you're brave for doing that. I also like that the protagonist is a female, it gives an interesting twist on things. I can't wait to read more.

  • WhiteGirl
    May 3, 2005
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    oops thnx!

  • riskybusiness
    May 2, 2005
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    boom splat eek im scared dude...scared...the only guy who i thought cud do something kool died...depressing...


  • Shantell
    May 2, 2005
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    This is turning out to be a very interesting story, keep it up. I think you meant throw instead of through at this one part "If you kill him then I shall through myself from this tower"

    Lotsa Luck, Shantell

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