Nothing to do

Nothing to do1

But stay with you.2

You hit me3

You hurt me4

But where can I go?5

I'm just seven6

And this is my home.7

You may hurt me8

But you're my daddy.9

Do you ever feel guilt after?10

Does it really hurt you more then me?11

Mommy was smart12

And ran while she could.13

I didn't go with her but I wanted to stay with you.14

Now I know that was a big mistake.15

I hid under the bed when came in tonight you didn't find me.16

For that night I was safe.17

Mommy came in through the window.18

She took me away.19

Far away.20

Daddy won't find us.21

Daddy can't find us.22

From now on daddy is less then a distant memory.

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  • J-Dus
    January 3

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    Very sad poem. Knowing someone that was abused as a child, it hits kind of close to home. Keep up the great work!!!


  • Living.Disaster
    January 3

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    Awww. I am glad that the mother came and took the child away away from the father...
    This poem made me smile and sad.I like when poems make me do that so thanks
    Good writing
    Keep it up


  • Artificial.Smiles. gold member
    January 2

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    Awwww. I felt so bad, then so relieved when the mother came. But I was also pissed that the mother left the kid alone.

    Now my emotions are mixed up!

    Anyways,I did like the poem, and it made me sad and happy at the same time.

    Good Luck in my Contest!


  • Much-Dipstick
    December 30, 2008

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    Awwwww, this was cute. I loved how the mother came back ... that was a good thing to hear. I also particularly liked how the child wondered about the dad's character, without being totally set on him being evil; that really helped show the innocence. Also, you didn't mention the character's gender, which is another good thing; it expresses equality and reminds us this can happen to either. Great poem and really thoughtful work. Brilliant job, and keep writing!
    ~Luck~