Yesterday: We put in our palms, a smile.
We were so happy that our palms were laughing.
Crazy with happiness we bumped our head to Heaven.
Pain defeated us and threw us back to Earth.1
Today: When we woke up we were two trees
And our hands were branches of despair.
We begged the Heavens to bring back the happiness.
Seeing that nobody was listening,
We decided to help ourselves.2
Tomorrow: Our hands will grow beneath the Earth
And so we will find ourselves again.
We`ll catch the smile in our hands...
And our faces looking to heaven
Will smile with shyness
Blossoming for the first time.3
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Comments
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welcome to round two did you mis spell journal as jurnal on purpose?
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Very interesting.
It's got a uniqueness about it
that's very catchy and reminds
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Different.
That is how I would describe this,it's sort of a poem,but is a sense It's not.
Today:When we woke up we were two trees
And our hands were branches of despair.
We begged the Heavens to bring back the happiness.
Seeing that nobody was listening,
We decided to help ourselves.
My Favorite out of the three.
I Heart This!
Good Luck To You!
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A few grammar issues here and there. I think the first verse is the strongest, but the entire thing is cool.
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I would apriciate if you could list the mistakes, so I can fix them....I`m not a native english speaker so I have no idea what is wrong and what is not... I use the spellcheck every time but there is no such thing as grammer check
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"Pain defeated us and threw us back to Earth"
"We begged the Heavens..."
"Seeing that nobody was listening..."
"Catch the smile in our hands..."
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thank you. I fixed it.
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This was interesting, and it was amazing. It was so different, and unique. I liked it a lot!
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