All I ever wanted to be was wanted
accepted for who
and what I am.1
For someone to look at me
and see
who I truly am.
Not what they wanted me
to be.2
All I ever wanted to be
was loved.
To be touched with gentleness
and kindness.3
For passion to ignite
into a burning flame
til two lovers become one.4
All I ever wanted to be
was the girl inside
not the one outside looking in.5
All I ever wanted
was to be...6
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A contest entry
- Poetry!!(: by Artificial.Smiles..
180 points, ended January 2, 41 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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I LOVED IT! i have no words to decribe how good it was. well donee
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Relating!!!
I love your poem! It was a different experience to relate to some one elses words as much as I did. Thank you so much for sharing!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Spiffeh.
I like it. Though...I think that in some places, like 'All I ever wanted to be was loved. To be touched with gentleness and kindness.', it's a simple stanza that is easy to understand, which is ok and good. Then in places like, 'For passion to ignite into a burning flame til two lovers become one.', it's complex and takes a bit of thought. I think you should go either way. Either simple or complex. Not a mix.
Overall, though, it's great. Wonderful work. -
Wow.
This was so beautiful! I loved every piece of it!
Good Luck in my Contest!
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