Just Say No

Just Say No1

You told me to tell you,
But at first I said no
Then you pressured me,
And although it was slow,2

I spilled.3

Now it’s too late to pretend,
You finally know my secret,
And I’ve gone into debt.4

So now you’re gone for the night,
But I know you hate me with all your might.

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I wrote this after I told my crush that I liked him.

GIMMEH SOME FEEDBACK, Y'ALL! :)

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  • peterlover
    December 17, 2008
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    it was awesome and really strong i hope u write more like it!!!


  • beezy92
    December 10, 2008

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    You brave thing! That is something that I have yet to do yet. What'd he say back?

    (Nice poem. I like it a lot! Your best work in my opinion.)

    • MrsSpunkRansom
      December 11, 2008
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      ...he just said..."ok." Buuuuttt, then I had to lie and say, "Oh, I don't like you anymore...I never really did, blah blah blah..." and now we're good.
      Correction.
      He's good.

      • beezy92
        December 11, 2008
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        You could tell he didn't like you back? Maybe he needed time. Either way, go you! (: I'm sorry you're not good )= But you'll find a good boy. You're only thirteen...you'll find tons of good boys Or bad boys, however you like them


  • Pixels
    December 10, 2008

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    Oh... my... gosh times two.

    First off, luffly poem, Kitty! I really love it, all of the words are so beautiful together, it's just so.. wow. My favorite part was when you said "I spilled." It sepreates the rhyming, which makes it awesome.

    And aw, I' so sorry! You know what happened with me too, so we're in the same boat.

    Anyways, I love this! X3


  • Bullet.Name
    December 7, 2008

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    Aaaawwwwwwwwww

    At first I didn't know exactly what this was about but I figured it out fast and let me just say it again...'AAAAAWWWWW!'

    But I gotta ask, does he honestly hate you???


  • Friesian
    December 6, 2008

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    awww!

    This is really emotional and powerful! The rhyme scheme is fantastic, the choice of words very fitting! I like this line the best:

    "Now it’s too late to pretend,
    You finally know my secret,
    And I’ve gone into debt"

    Ur a great poet! U should write more poems! Lissy likes them!

    Excellent job on getting those feelings out, too! I could never have spilled mine into the short amount of words that u did! Excellent!

    -Lissy

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