The road seemed endless as they turned left than right. She tried her best to keep up with all the turns but her head was foggy from something they must have given her. Darkness came over her as she drifted into unconsciousness.1
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Karina was only seventeen, her life not quite planned out yet. Although she did have an idea of what she wanted out of life; and Karina always got what she wanted!3
I guess her beauty and all that unconditional praise from her parents had something to do with her idea that the world was created so others could behold her beauty and do her bidding. Karina didn't know what the word "share" meant.4
Karina's little sister; Cortney knew very well that she came second. Cortney was always in her sister's shadow, it was a lonely dark place at times but mostly Cortney was glad she was invisiable.5
When Cortney was left alone at least she didn't have to hear about how great Karina was... how beautiful her long dark curls were; compared to Cortney's red kinky curls! Yes, it was nice to be alone.6
Cortney didn't need others to tell her how great she was; she knew how to be great all on her own! Cortney would escape to any world she wanted in her large collection of books. Alone in her bedroom...which she painted black(of course Karina's room was pink) Cortney would spend hours escaping to different worlds and being whoever she wanted to be. Cortney would have been happy just as she was, only one day everything changed for her!7
On the way home from school that day the gathering clouds promised a summer thunderstorm! Which to Cortney was a perfect day for reading a new book. The little bookstore on the corner was her favorite place to go. She knew the folks who owned "The Way Out" bookstore always loved to she her come in! It wasn't easy finding a book she hadn't read yet, but she finally found something. A good mystery; yeah, that would be nice to read on this stormy day!8
Cortney paid for her book and Mrs. Collins said, "thank-you,honey" and come back again!" Cortney always loved the way Mrs. Collins called her "honey" and thought at least someone wanted her around.9
Cortney left the store with a smile on her face(which was rare)and began her walk home. Before she got around the corner, that storm decided it could wait no longer! The sky opened up and the rain began pouring down. Cortney couldn't see where she was going and she walked(well, crashed was more like it)into someone who was trying to run for shelter. Cortney's book went flying out of her hand! She tried to grab for it but missed. The puddle of water it was meant to land in was cheated out of its prize!10
Scotty,that was the "hero's" name(at least that's what he became to Cortney)caught the book as he went falling to the ground! Cortney looked down at the most beautiful boy she had ever seen even with all that mud covering his face! Scotty stood up with a huge smile on his face and the book safely tucked in his arms. "I believe this belongs to you my lady" said the most sweet voice she had ever heard. Cortney looked up into his green eyes...the greenest eyes she had ever seen(hers were a dark brown)she knew this was someone she would invite into her(I don't need anyone)world!11
Cortney knew she had found her soul-mate! Everyday after that they met at that same corner and would share each others company reading a book to each other and escaping to that world together. One day when Cortney was rushing off to meet Scotty for their daily escape, she never realized she was being followed! Karina could not understand why her sister seemed so happy lately. "What does she have that is putting that stupid grin on her face?" Whatever it was Karina thought surely it was suppose to belong to her. When she seen Cortney turn the corner Karina hid behind an old oak tree and watched as the most handsome boy she had ever laid eyes on came right up to her sister and they took hands as they sat down together on the curb! "I can't believe it,what is he doing with her!"12
Karina couldn't believe he would choose to be with Cortney if he knew that she was available! So,naturally Karina walked right over to them intruding on their privacy. "Hi,Cortney what a surprize to see you here!" Cortney didn't know what to say or do. Scotty stood up to face Karina and the look on his face said everything! Cortney knew without a doubt that he would never belong just to her again. Karina said,"I was just going to the mall to hang out and maybe get an ice cream,why don't you and your friend here come along?"13
Cortney had never been invited by her sister to go anywhere. Well, she wasn't going to go with her now and share her friend! Besides she knew Karina didn't really want to be with her. Cortney told Karina that her and Scotty would rather stay and finish their book they were in the middle of before it got dark. Before she had barely gotten the words out Scotty said,"Well...Cort the book could wait until tomorrow...couldn't it?" Cortney felt her heart breaking as she said,"yes, I guess it can." Karina smiled sweetly,batting her long lashes and flipping her dark curls as she started walking away with Cortney's hero! Cortney ran home to her black lonely room and cried the first and last tears she would ever cry. And plained her revenge!14
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Karina slowly began to wake up. It was so dark she couldn't see her hand in front of her face! As the haze of the drug began to ware off Karina started to feel terrible pain! Slowly she reached up and touched her face. Karina couldn't seem to understand why her face felt funny. All at once a light shone brightly in her face and at first she couldn't see what was right in front of her! Than as her eyes adjusted to the light Karina saw the mirror...and what she seen made her scream the most horrible sound that only her ears would hear! The mirrors reflection showed the most hideous face...the acid that was poured on her left nothing of her beauty. At the bottom of the mirror was written two words in bright pink..."Love Cortney"16
Very pleased with herself Cortney sat in her dark lonely room and deep down arose a laugh like never before. Cortney's life had just begun...she would never read another book because from now on she was going to write her own!17
A contest entry
- Taste of the South by Mel-the-Believer.
100 points, ended February 1, 10 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Lawrie pointed out what I was going to say. Other than that, poor Cortney always getting passed over, but it looks like she got her revenge. Not sure I would go as far as to put acid on my sister's face, but hey whatever floats your boat right? Good luck in the contest! -Liz
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Thanks much!!

Yeah, I think maybe Cortney took it a bit to far but....than again I'm not Cortney!
Thanks again
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Creepy but an excellent read.
I liked the ending, I guess that makes me a revengeful meanie but psh whatever!
I really liked this story. You got me to sympathise with the character, which was great. I wonder what happened to the guy though.
Great Story!

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Thanks much for reading and commenting!
As for the guy "Scotty" as most guys he moved on to someone else!
I don't know...maybe their story will continue one day.
Thanks again!
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What a great ending!
I wasn't sure of the purpose of the opening paragraph until I reached the penultimate paragraph and then it all fell into place.
The story is well formulated and is written in a way to make reading a pleasure.
I guess the rather shallow Karina received her come-uppance with a vengeance
I'm not too sure of what to make of Cortney; I certainly wouldn't like to cross her.
There are a few typos for you to take a look at:
p5 invisiable = invisible
p8 she her = see her
p9 come back again" = "come back again"
p12 when she seen = when she saw
p14 plained = planned
I enjoyed this well written, well formulated story which has a truly wonderful shock ending.

beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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Thanks for the read and comment! Yeah, the quiet ones like Cortney are the ones to look out for! ha ha!! Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the heads up on my typos!
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Defenitely creepy, but I liked it. This was quite an interesting story you wrote here. Thanks so much for entering. Good luck in the contest. God Bless!
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Thanks much for the read and comment! This contest gave me the chance to get back to writing short stories! Thanks!
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