The Pirate

This is Tom: . was drinking when a came in his house. The asked where he could find an to bury his . When walked away and began to watch on his 's TV, the acted and dragged away.1

The called over a for them to ride to the nearest beach. When they got there, the caught some *turtles*s and tied them to a raft to pull to the . tied a few s to it so the didn't have as much to do.2

When they finally arrived, the buried his and set free the s and s. When they were through, the played a tune on his and begun to . When they had ed late into the night, they fell asleep under the s.

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  • Elisabeth gold member
    December 9, 2008
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    You should do well when the Emoticon contests come up, which they do - every few months.

    Try * turtle * it should work better Ah, you got it right later on,

    Sorry, I don't have an emotional response to put, other than it takes a lot of time to do one of these, and sometimes the story is sacrificed in favour of smileys, which is a heck of a shame

    Elisabeth.

    beginning: 1, language: 1, plot: 1, ending: 5, dialog: 1, characters: 1.


  • XxMiSsKiKixX
    December 7, 2008
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    i like it


  • Len Shadow
    December 4, 2008
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    ok, i messed up and now it isn't in the contest, but if you can, enjoy it.