i can't give up on you

i can't give up1

i won't give in2


I was so happy when you smiled3

Your smile broke through the clouds of grey4


Far from the sunny days that lie in sleep5

Waiting with patience for the spring6

When the flowers will bloom new again7

I know there's more beyond the pain of today8


i can't give up9

i won't give in10


Although the scars of yesterday remain11

You can go on living as much as your heart believes12


You can't be born again 13

Although you can change14

i thought we could say forever15

together always16


i know what people say about you17

your friends dislike me to18

but, i can't give up on you19

just yet20


i can't give up21

i won't give in22


how can you ignore my love forever23

i will haunt your mind and dreams24


i look at how we were together25

these wounds you've opened will not heal26

i realize that you refuse to see me27

but i'll sit on you door until you explain28


i know what people say about you29

your friends dislike me to30

but, i can't give up on you31

just yet32


i can't give up33

i won't give in34


i can't give up on you35

just yet36

just yet37

i'll never give up on you

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meant to be like a song

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  • Windsong1041
    December 29, 2008
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    ;-)

    I really like it!!! Congrats And keep writing!!!

  • Rorshach gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    yeah, sounds like a song

    A bit like one of Avril lavignes many bad boyfriend songs. If a guy wrote this he'd probably have a restraining order slapped on him. Very girly

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  • sparkly butterfly
    December 6, 2008
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    i liked it :D

    i know how you feel i reallly loved it and it is really good you should keep on writing

  • Elphinstone
    December 5, 2008

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    I liked it, (well, as much as someone can like about a story/poem about such a sad fact of life

    but yeah, seriously, well written. I honestly thought I didn't have any tears left in me, and you proved me wrong. Well done.

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  • Master Shatly
    December 5, 2008

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    Aww

    I can relate to this. Written well and you can feel the sadness from it. I think you captured the feeling of that kind of situation pretty well.

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