The realization felt like a knife twisted through the heart. It didn't work anymore. The blasted thing did not work anymore! NOW, after everything, after all this time, after everything, I finally have something to write about - I can finally leave something behind when this man-forsaken, animal-forsaken, god-forsaken, BLOODY ISLAND is discovered. I finally have the words to describe everything I am, everything I've learnt, everything I've become. The truth has never been clearer, and somebody needs to know this, AND MY PEN IS OUT OF INK!! All I can do is shout it out. Day after day, into empty air. The story of everything that's happened on this island in the past ten years. Nobody shall ever see it, but the skies tonight shall hear the story of exactly why my pen ran out of ink.
A contest entry
- Starting Paragraphs by LiveLoveJabberwocky.
175 points, ended December 25, 2008, 26 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Are sentences too repetitive? Were you amused? Were you curious?
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Both curious an amused, yeah
That was very good! That was a very interesting paragraph, I really enjoyed it I'd definitely like to read some more of your work, as you seem to write the way I like Great job and thanks for entering!
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Yes, I was curious, and amused. It certainly does seem like a good story starter
I think the repetition is ok - the one time it seems to be a bit much as when you repeat "after everything" - I'm not sure if this was intentional/for effect or a mistake. The rest of it works out well - it's just that one part I wasn't sure about.
I would want to read more of this, if you plan on writing more
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There's no story behind this, at all. If there was it would have to be a really good story. I usually start all my stories with a paragraph I find interesting.
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