The Path of Order

Here I will explain the path that I walk, and would like you to follow also. You must walk without hate or complacency. To hate is to kill, to be complacent is to be impatient.
You must be patient and unable to kill. You must see that fighting is caused by misunderstanding, which can be avoided with patience.
Master patience and you will master your mind, master your mind and you will own your tongue, own your tongue and you will become diplomatic, be diplomatic and you can avoid conflict, avoid conflict and you will be at peace.

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  • Luke Back In Anger
    December 17, 2008

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    Interesting

    Short, sharp and to the point if not a little bit misguided (In my opinion)

    All in all though nice one.

    If you want a sickening tale read "Pikeytown" for me and tell me what you think.

    Nice job on this piece.

    All the best.

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  • Annie13
    December 13, 2008
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    hmmm....yeah I like it, and your thinking...keep writing


  • Alixine
    December 8, 2008

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    I absolutely agree with your philosophy. Thought I of course would be preaching to the choir if I were to tell people to be patient and they will be at peace. I am a completely impatient, especially with others; people are so utterly simple-minded and rejecting that I'd given up with patience long ago.
    Great job, though! Thanks for sharing this! Keep it up!

    ~Alix ♥

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  • Kakashi-sensei
    December 4, 2008

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    I think this is a good grasp on philosophy...

    ...A very good grasp...

    It's the kind I try to live by anyway.
    Well done.


  • whichcraft Greeters member
    December 2, 2008

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    I agree with what you have written but it is so hard to have patience. When I was younger and free spirited, I had a lot of patience but now that I am older and involved with so many things and different personalities of people, patience is something you have to remaster in your life. I agree with your statement because I think sometimes you have to step back and ask yourself why you are being impatient. Is it the person you're dealing with, the situation your dealing with or is it you not being able to deal? Thank you for sharing your thoughts and welcome to Storywrite.

  • Stryke Greeters member
    December 2, 2008

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    Sounds like you have it all figured out I'm too this way and that i suppose to be so well constructed

    Great job
    Welcome to the site!
    Good with your writing!
    Rian (greeter)

  • Lithron
    December 2, 2008
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    Yes

    I think it gets better every time. You now need to write a story. NOW!

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