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" Pamela! Pamela! " Jessie called to me as she ran down the hall.2
" Yeah? " I asked, stoppping in my tracks.3
" You'll...never guess...where...I was...yesterday. " She was so out of breath from running and being excited, I thought she was going to have another asthma attack.4
" The moon? " That's where I kinda hoped she would go most of the time. She was always making up crazy stories, and I knew whatever she had to say was probably going to be another one of her doozies.5
" No, but you're close! " She squealed.6
I rolled my eyes and began to walk away. She grabbed my arm and pulled me back so forcefully I almost fell on the floor. For the shortest kid in the fourth grade, she was pretty strong. 7
" No, wait, listen to me! " She continued. " I went to a planet called Startis! "8
" I'll bet. "9
" No, it's true! " Her big, sky blue eyes widened. Her freckled face turned beet red. As she lowered her head and looked down at the floor, I really believed she was going to start crying. At this point I really did not know what to say to her.10
" You know the old, abandoned mansion, just past Mr. Jenkins, the rock man's house? " She asked me.11
" The one the older kids like to hang out at over the summer? Bad things are always happening over there. " It was true. One summer night a guy decided to camp out by it because his friends dared him to. The next morning he was found with his throat slit. That place always gave me the willies.12
" Yeah, well, after Sunday School, yesterday I got bored. So I decided to go for a walk. I wandered over by the mansion and decided to take a look around. There must be hundreds of miles of land! That place is huge! As I was walking I heard a strange noise. It sounded like the kind Pac Man makes when he eats those little orange dots-- "13
" They're yellow. " I corrected her.14
" No, I think they're orange. But it doesn't matter! I heard the noise when I looked up and saw this spaceship. It looked like a silver disc and it landed right in front of me! Then this alien came out and talked to me! Her name was LuLu and she was pink and fuzzy! She had four legs and antennas. She took me on the spaceship and we went to her planet, Startis! She said she might come back and see me. I want you to come with me and meet her after school today! " 15
" I don't know. " I said.16
" Come with me pleeeeze! " She begged. Jumping up and down, and whining like a big baby.17
" Alright I'll think about it! " I yelled. " I'm gonna be late. "18
I strode off to my classroom, room 4A, thanking God that her and I weren't in the same class. I would not be able to take it if I had to listen to her all day. It's not that I did not like Jessie, of course, she was my best friend. But unfortunately she was the biggest storyteller in the world. She would say anything to get attention. She told stories of unicorns coming to her bedroom window, and finding leprechauns in her back yard. The killer was when she told everyone at school that her dad was a big music executive. She claimed that she knew every celebrity imaginable and was going to get everyone whatever concert tickets they wanted-- for free! Everyone was happy until the following week when one of the popular kids at school caught her dad working in the meat department at the grocery store. Then, they all became furious. Ever since then, the kids at school always made fun of her. They eventually began picking on me, too, because of my association with her. I was beginning to get sick and tired of it all! I tried talking to her about making things up all the time, but it only made things worse. She would cry and complain how no one understood her.19
This UFO story at the cursed, old mansion was not only proof that things were getting worse, but it was also the icing on the cake for me. I'd had enough of it! When I walked in to the cafeteria Matt, the most obnoxious boy in the world ran up to me.20
" Hey Spammy Pammy! I hear you and Pinocchio are going to Mars! " 21
" Shut up! " I responded.22
I found Jessie sitting at a table with Kim and Sara, the two most easy going girls I ever met. She was telling them all about her " trip to the planet Startis " as they patiently listened. I leaned over on the table and got in her face.23
" Why are you telling people I'm going to another planet with you? "24
" Well, you are, aren't you? " 25
" I never even agreed to go to the mansion with you!!! " I banged my fist on the table and stormed away. 26
From across the lunchroom I sat alone in a corner eating my peanut butter and jelly sandwich. I watched Jessie quickly recover from my fit and continue to recount her story about travelling to some other galaxy far away from here. The excitement of it all made her face glow and her blue eyes brighten. Her strawberry blonde pony tail swayed back and forth as she rocked her head and bounced around in her seat. She was having a grand old time. I could hear her voice boom as she became louder and more excited. 27
" The planet Startis is located just beyond the nebula! It is made out of blue, yellow, and green cheese! I was there for about two hours, but when I got home, my watch said I had only been gone for about twenty- five minutes! The alien, LuLu, gave me a rainbow colored rock with little crystals in it, but I put it in my pocket and lost it. " 28
On and on Jessie went telling her amazing story. After school let out, she caught me while I was walking across the street to my house. 29
" Please go with me! Please! " She begged. She looked up at me earnestly and held on to my arm. I could hear her wheezing under her breath. She really wanted me to go. Though I really didn't want to set foot anywhere near that old, scary mansion, I decided to try to let go of my fear and walk over there with her. Maybe it would prove to her how ridiculous her stories were, and she would stop telling them. 30
I told my mother that Jessie and I were going to hang out, and after that we began our trek down to the abandoned mansion. It was a warm and sunny May afternoon, but as we got closer to the mansion the sky began to turn gray. The same color gray as that of the haunted European castles you read about sometimes in books. That's exactly what the mansion looked liked to me as I noticed it peeking out from behind a hill. 31
But one thing I noticed was that Jessie was right about one thing. The property was amazing. Miles of land seemed to stretch out endlessly. It was surrounded by a black painted metal fence. As Jessie yanked open the gate my stomach turned as I noticed the red and white " WARNING: DO NOT ENTER " sign hanging from it. 32
" It's alright. " Jessie tried to comfort me.33
We walked a little ways and then sat down somewhere in the middle of the field, which Jessie referred to as " the " spot. We sat there for about fifteen or twenty minutes when I began to look at her questioningly. 34
" LuLu will be here! " She exclaimed.35
We continued waiting and after about half an hour I told her it was time for me to go home. She sat there looking down at the grass. Her face was turning red again and her eyes were flooding with tears. I figured she must have really learned her lesson this time.36
" It's okay, Jess. " I said as I helped her up.37
As we began walking my foot suddenly stumbled on something awkward and heavy, which caused me to nearly fall to the ground. When Jessie looked down to see what it was, she nearly squealed. I looked down to see a beautiful, shiny rock which glistened in a stunning array of red, orange, green, yellow, and blue. It looked like there were small diamonds stuck in it. I had never seen anything like it anywhere. 38
" It's the rock LuLu gave to me! We found it! " 39
" It's pretty. " I told her. " We should find out what kind it is. " 40
" We should show it to Mr. Jenkins! He's into rocks, and he lives right over here! I bet he would like it! " Jessie became excited.41
" That's a good idea. " I said.42
Jessie smiled ear to ear as we traipsed over to Mr. Jenkins' house. We found him on his front lawn watering his flower garden. He was old with white hair and big, hazel eyes. He moved to Florida the following year, so I never got to know him very well. But he always seemed nice. People said he knew everything about rocks and fossils because he used to be a geologist and worked for a museum. 43
Jessie ran up to him screaming. " Mr. Jenkins! Mr. Jenkins! Look at my rock! "44
Mr. Jenkins happily examined her rock, and seemed very impressed with it.45
" This is stunning! " He exclaimed.46
" Can you tell us what kind it is? " I asked.47
" Well, it certainly isn't peacock ore...but it looks like a mineral..." His voice suddenly lowered. "... I don't think we have anything like this that comes from earth. "48
All of a sudden, he gasped and smiled at Jessie. His eyes began to twinkle. " Have you been hanging around someone named LuLu recently? " 49
Jessie giggled. Her and Mr. Jenkins' eyes locked as they smiled at each other. I wondered what the two of them were thinking. I felt as if they were sharing some sort of unusual psychic connection, and I began to feel very left out. I took a step back and watched them.50
" And people say the moon is made of cheese, huh? " Mr. Jenkins laughed. Jessie giggled some more. 51
He then carefully placed the rock back in to the palm of her hand and whispered. " Thank- you for sharing it with me. "52
" Your welcome. " She replied.53
As we were leaving Mr. Jenkins then shouted something to Jessie. It sounded strange and I wondered what it meant.54
" Eeeowiiiya!!! "55
When Jessie looked back at him, I caught the two of them winking at each other.56
Jessie and I then walked home quietly. The sky was still gray and cloudy, and a cool summer breeze beat against our cheeks as we walked. I didn't really know what to say to her. I wasn't even sure what had happened. To this day, five years later, I still don't really know. All I know is that after that day she never spoke about aliens or the planet Startis again. Her stories eventually seemed less elaborate, and she began to tell the truth more.57
Last summer I took my dog, Sniffles, for a walk near the old mansion when I heard the strange Pac Man type sound that Jessie had spoke of. It started out softly but then became louder. Sniffles went crazy and ran around in circles until the noise stopped. Then he peed next to the fence. When I looked up in the sky it was too gray and cloudy to see anything. I wanted to tell Jessie about what had happened, but that was the same day she came up missing. She left her house that morning telling her mom that she was going to visit with a friend named LuLu. After that she was never seen again. Though I miss Jessie, I'm glad she finally found friends who understand her.58
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imaginative
Interesting short story. I think the plot could use a little more development. How do you know Mr. Jenkins? What is the conflict? Describe it a little more. I love the adjectives you use and the story is wonderfully imaginative. This seems like a children's story, which i don't enjoy as much, but still with a science fiction edge to it. Perhaps, the material is too simplified for my taste (I tend to enjoy the psychological aspects of a story), but it is a wonderful story none-the-less. I understand that the characters are fourth-grade students, but you could add more details about the kid who got his throat slit to add to the suspense when the two girl's finally go up to it. I could really see the characters and imagine myself in their places when you described the flip in Pamela's stomach when Jessie opened the gate marked with a "WARNING: DO NOT ENTER" sign.
Overall, wonderful descriptions, I just wish there was a little more development.
God bless.
~Faile~
