Say The Things You Never Said : Starter paragraph

Who would have thought, the new girl and the popular guy, the ugly duckling and the greek god, eyes pouring with secrets, would be happy together through everything and never lose sight upon love? It pains me to admit I thought it never true. But the day that boy walked up to me, a genuine half million dollar smile upon his flawless face, my heart began pounding against my chest, my stomach flowed with butterflies, and I thought this could only be a dream, yet secretly prayed to myself over and over that it were real. I remember everything, from his light blue eyes, his black shaggy hair, his one dimple in his right cheek... it was one of those rare moments when your heart and you mind pair up against you, pulling at those certain memories, forcing you to remember everything, never letting go unless you promise, and really promise, you will hold onto this memory for the rest of your life and never let it go. I promised, and I never forgot.

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Kidnap the Sandy Claws!And I have no idea from what movie this line comes from
Name: Cerbie20

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  • LiveLoveJabberwocky
    December 20, 2008

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    It definitely leaves me hanging, which in this case is good! You have me wanting to read more, which is the whole point of the contest I really enjoyed this, as romances are basically my guilty pleasure Great job, and thanks for entering!