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Today was Heather McDonald's wedding day; she lived in the highlands of Scotland where life was tough and not many eligible men to be found. However she had met a man, she thought she could soon grow to love, given time. He was very well to do and had a fine house down in the glen by the Loch at Inverness. His name was Angus, Angus McPhee nine years her senior, a kind man and well respected by her kin folk.2
She stood in her bridal gown made of the finest ivory satin and lace; it suited her fair complexion and her shiny auburn hair that always caught the glint of the sun. Heather, a Scottish maiden, as she was called by the folk in the highlands, had not been touch by the hands of a man, nothing marred her beauty, her silky soft skin was unblemished, her eyes the colour of deepest emeralds and rich ruby lips that formed an alluring pout.3
News came fast with a knock at her door, poor Angus had been killed in a freak accident on his wedding morn. His carriage overturned on the high ridged track, just above the Loch. Heather was stricken with grief, she hadn’t yet felt the giddy pangs of love but she knew in time she would have grown a different kind of love, she would have been very content with that. Now she was alone, her beautiful face crumpled with tears as she ran off to the woods. She found her favorite rock amongst the lilac trees, down in the glen. She’d always come here since a bonnie wee lassie; it was her secret place to think.4
Still in her wedding gown she sobbed and sobbed and out of respect to Angus she would now, never know the touch of a man on her body. She was thrown into mourning for a man she never truly loved, how could she ever find her dream happiness now?5
Then she felt a strong hand come to rest on her shoulder. She turned and found herself looking up into the eyes of Ewan McGowan, a tall handsome man around her age, she had never met him but knew of him, the girls in the village had talked about him, he had just moved to Inverness a month ago.6
He never spoke a word to Heather he just put his lips to hers and wrapped his strong arms about her waist. She thought her heart would stop beating, it was erratic, something she had never experienced before. Her curvy breasts rose and fell with her breathy silent sighs. She responded to his touch with a fire raging through her veins, and thought she would burst open because till now, she had been quite numb inside. Heather knew it was very wrong to be enveloped in the embracing arms of this man, on her wedding day, but her wanton body craved for his touch.7
Ewan picked her up and gently laid her down amongst the ferns by the rock, then lay himself down beside her, he had never seen such a beauty and took his lips to hers. Heathers mouth gently parted to let him in, and his tongue explored hers in a passionate dance. His hands moved over her silky skin which smelled of roses, and trailed his fingers down her body till he found the warm soft flesh of her milky thighs, underneath her satin wedding gown. Heather gave no resistance; her body pleaded for more of his touch, she arched her back to press against him, and a throbbing sensation took hold of her loins.8
Ewan’s expert hands found their way underneath her petticoat’s and removed her under garment, down over her long legs. He pushed aside her dress from her shoulders and by doing so; it revealed her ample breasts making Heather feel naked underneath his gaze. She found herself fumbling nervously with the opening of his trousers and managed to undo them without embarrassment, he willingly lifted his body to ease the removal of his clothes. Heather was very shocked and surprised at how big he felt between her nimble fingers, and raised her head to look; it was her first sighting of an aroused man.9
Ewan let out a low moan as she stroked his hard swollen manhood. He reached down between her thighs gently caressing her, he could tell she was a virgin and felt a kind of protectiveness wash over him. Heather succumbed to Ewan’s tender caresses as she relaxed and allowed him entry. Her whole body raged with ecstasy and wonderful vibrations, she never thought she would ever experience anything like this. She was in the throes of her first orgasm, tasting sweet delights, from a man who’s desire of her, was a gift from God. Now she had finally found someone to really love.10
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Author notes
This is my first ever attempt at short story writing
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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WOW
this story is very out there i loved it. i hope to read more wonderfull storys.overall: 8.
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Thank you LadyMidnight for reading this story, I really appreciate it...my first story actually...~Lilac~
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beautiful and sexy.
this was written very well,lots of good imagery and intresting feelings.
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Well, well, well, we meet again dear friend. I like this a lot and it reflects the genre well. -
Beautifully penned
WOW! you are such a great story writer. you keep the reader interested from start to finish. Your pictures are always so complimenting of the piece. They jump start the imagination at the very beginning allowing it to grow through out the entire poem. poetry/stories are all fantastically done. I love them all!
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Captivating
How does passion and desire manifest itself? Well, you for one know the answer to this question. This was not writing! This was Love dripping like dew from oversaturated heartstrings from an instrument that longed to be played, and I? I longed to be Ewan. Now where shall I place my tears? Thank you! -
That was very prettily told, not trashy at all. I love the relaxed feeling this piece had to it; not rushed, just her, experiencing. A lovely write and a wonderful read, I'm really glad I clicked it
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Beautiful Erotica
Dear Lilac,you never cease to amaze me.I'm just wondering what you will come up with next.Your poems are beautiful, and this was a Very Erotic story,written most definately with Class.I wish you luck in the competition. shadow -
great!
An erotic tale that's sweet and gentle,I love that
.You deserve my applause for this poem,it'a a nice written one .
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Thank you Topaz for your honest comments...I have made an adjustment in the light of what you said but instead of changing 'Then she felt a strong hand'.....I changed 'standing' to 'She stood in her bridal gown'
also a small adjustment to the last sentence......this is the first story I have ever written...when I saw the contest advertised I was so eager to take up the challenge -
I found this to be a curious mix of tenses and grammar. It has a coherent story line and develops nicely but needs editing to correct the odd changes in perspective.
'She's standing in her bridal gown' - reported action. You as the author are telling us.(outside looking in) present tense
'Then she felt a strong hand come to rest on her shoulder'
felt is past tense
To comply with the perspective of the first example this should read
'Then she feels a strong hand come to rest on her shoulder'
Difficult to maintain a dialogue isn't it? Sometimes it takes another reader to point out things. This is why editors and proof readers exist lol
I think you might have got caught up in the last sentence, it's three lines long
Nice story, nice plot and develops well. Polish it and it might well shine bright where it now merely glows.
Good luck in the contest.
Topaz135
Romantic? hey I dunno I'm a man lol shrugs
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This had the knight in shining armor effect...and was bittersweet in the thoughts of growing to love one and then to find true love around the bend...good luck and best wishes...Peace Muddy
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A truly romantic and lovely story. Thank you for entering.
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outstanding
Wowww this is a very nicely written story. It starts out sad but then starts building from there into a very erotic and sensual story that unfolds extremely well, not only did Heather find out what is was like by becoming a women, but she was also able to find a true love. Extremely well written with a very high class of eroticism. I hope that you extremely well in the contest. The picture that you selected is perfect for the storyline. Great work, you should be proud -
i liked it how fate saved her from a lovless marraige and gifted her with someone else. the way you described her sexual experience was very classy. good work
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Awww this is really sweet! Not highly erotica, more adult orientated, which I guess is why it is written for "Erotica With Class" lol... What a tremendous mix of emotions, from hearing the death of your husband to be, to having your first orgasm... Definately the best day of her life lol, shame she hadn't married first and got half of his estate! Joke! lol
I thought this was really delicately written,
Great job,
xx Katie xx
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Sad at the beginning but happy ending...love it
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