Dear God,1
Daddy was a good man. He was a good daddy for me and my brother. He was a good husband for Mommy. I know he is safe, but I miss him a whole lot.2
Mommy said Daddy died in his sleep, and it didn't hurt or nothin'. I know better than that, God. I know that he died because of a bullet in Iraq, so don't go telling me the same thing that mommy did.3
Why did you let this happen? Please tell me, God. I'm very afraid becaues now Mommy is gone too and the door is banging and people are saying 'Child control'. I'm scared.4
I know Daddy is safe in your arms-please help me be safe too. I'm a big girl even though I'm crying. Daddy said it's Okay to cry sometimes.5
I miss him.6
Love a whole lot,7
Cassy
A contest entry
- Give me a prayer by trekkergirl.
150 points, ended December 15, 2008, 9 entries
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Awwww, cute! And sad...
I does kinda seem like a 5-year old's view. It's very hearttouching. Some people don't realize that children do realize that things are going on. A lot of times children are under-estimated.
-Maru Maru
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nice one.....
Children know, don't they? There's a lot of untold stories in here, and I would guess that, not only was she a Daddy's girl, Mommy wasn't too keen on her. and where was Mommy, why the child control.
It was probably a little outside the knowledge of a five-year-old, but it did bring home the insanity and unfairness of war and separation from a child's viewpoint. -
This is a very touching poem. One that I am sure happens in this cruel world that leaves children to the mercy of strangers and family who have neglected their children. Thanks for sharing this wonderfully emotional poem. And thanks for entering it into my contest.
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this seemed a little bit like some stories I have written, from a child's point of view. I didn't feel much emotion comming out of this, but that's probably because it is hard to write like a five year old and show emotion at the same time.
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Forgot to applaud!
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Awwww, this is so sad and sweet. :'( I luffles it!
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