It's you and me against the world!2
I love you dip, now and forever I was falling down into the black, my life had been ripped to pieces, everything was against me, i was hated, even by myself. i lived in misery, i couldnt find any joy in life, i trapped everything inside me and walked the world as a ticking bomb. Said that i was ok. didnt trust a living soul. but then suddenly, from nowhere. A angel appeared right in front of me, she offered me help. She listened to all my troubles, i opened up for her. i felt that i could trust this divine angel. she grabbed my hand, and pulled me out of the black, she helped me to find the light, to find all the joy in life. I was so stunned by her caring and warm heart. and i was shocked about the fact that she actually cared about me. we became friends, and started to talk about everything, i felt more and more that this angel was the most divine of all. the most perfect of all. My heart that had been dead for so long, suddenly started to beat. It started to beat for the angel. I felt love, for the first time in ages. I stopped to belive in love, but the prescence of the angel revived my heart. it started to beat faster and faster. safer and safer. i felt so alive, but yet my mind was thinking " how can a perfect angel like that, possibly love a ordinary mortal like me?" i thought liked that for a long time. But i felt so safe when i was close to this angel, i felt that i could open up and talk about everything, yeah really everything. Because she would understand, she would fix everything. so i told her about my burning love, and got stunned again. She answered the love, she felt the same love for me, for this simple mortal. I heard birds sing, i could feel everything good in life, because i had found my soulmate. The black, dark hole didnt exist anymore, all the existed around me was light, song, and joy. i felt so alive. and here i am today. I feel more alive then ever, i feel safe. And i feel protective, because i have someone to care about, someone to give all my love. My soul have finally found it's other half, i'm complete, i'm whole. everything is perfect. if i ever feel down, or just thoughtful. you make me feel so good, and you make my thoughts so clear. Everything feels so perfect with you here. I would give you everything in the world if i could, but all i have to offer is my love. my heart is truly yours, forever and ever. i never want to lose you. I'm here to care about you, if you ever lose your angelic powers, or if they face. i'm here to support you and grant you strength. Like you grant me strength. I wanna climb to the highest place in the world, and just scream out how much i love you, i wanna travel the world with you. And i feel that we can do anything, as long as we are together. If i let out a tear, you are there to catch it, and make it feel like it never was there. I feel so mighty and lucky for having you. I would do anything, just anything for you my love. Because you have already given me everything, your love, and that's all i ever could ask for. it's a dream that came true. You love me for who i am, and i love you for who you are. you are the most perfect person in all ways. so warm and caring, so intelligent, so handsome. you got it all. and to be with you, is the most beautiful for me in this world, you are my everything. I would never let anything bad happend to you, since you granted me the gift of feeling love and joy. 1
It's you and me against the world!2
I love you dip, now and forever
It's you and me against the world!2
I love you dip, now and forever Author notes
This is just something i had to get out of me 
my love for this amazing angel is filling me up i could write a thousand pages describing my love, but i think i should stop before i make you all go mental hehe
It's not corrected, first hand version
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awwwwwwwwwwww so sweet!
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aaawwwwwww!
thats so sweet! good job Davdi!
cheers
Becca
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What a great love story!
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I am randomly looking around, and this is really good. You have peaked my intrest. Keep up the good work....
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love, it conquers everything, makes a grown man sing etc
I hope the angel doesn't leave, the author here might full to pieces.
I can (believe it or not) actually relate to this a little bit though. I felt the same way about life and was always looking for an 'angel' to save me as well. Only difference for me was that nobody ever came along and i had to get through it all by myself. I feel that real strength comes from within and using somebody else as a crutch can often end in tears and leave you right back where you started from.
As for the story, not broken up as it should be, so harder to read than neccessary. The last bit where you are going on, and on about how great the angel is reads a bit long winded as well, we get the point quite early and there's no reason to elaborate.
grammer and spelling holds up well though and only a mean spirited person would really object to a piece like this that was written with so much joy. -
Ok it was fun to read. the color scheme made it seem christmas-y but evil at the same time... must have been the black background. This is probably a thank-you to someone, but I'll take my points where I can get em. You need to capitalize the "I"s and make it into different paragraphs. I know it isn't corrected, but I can't help pointing out the flaws and stuff. There weren't many flaws so it wasn't bad, but you should definitely edit it and show it to them, if they havent seen it already.
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That was a beautiful passage, and I can feel the love you have for this "angel". Now that you have the main idea of the passage down, you should work, like others have said, on improving the grammar and punctuation of the piece. I really enjoyed reading it, it filled my black abyss with hope for new love, thank you.
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Sweet, but you should really edit this. It would make it that much sweeter, if there weren't so many errors.
You should try to break this up into paragraphs. I almost didn't want to read it because it's just one huge block of words.
I was gonna say that you should definately show this to the person it's written about, but I see that you have. -
Thought I'd say again how much I love you how much I care about you and how good stuff is gonna be I can't WAIT for summer loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooovenesssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss, talk to you in the morning precious
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This was extremely sweet. ^^ I liked reading it, especially since I know the feeling of being in love. There's a lot of capitalization issues, and a few careless errors, but nothing major. "A angel appeared" should be "An angel appeared", "I stopped to belive in love" should be "I stopped to believe in love", prescence should be presence, "a ordinary" should be "an ordinary", and "thought liked" should be "thought like". Other than that I loved the peice overall. Keep up the good work!
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nice i reckon it was well written and got what you were saying across exactly the way you wanted to.
i know the feeling of being in the black abyss and not caring for anyone or anything and feeling that no one cared about you either i have been helped to get out of that situation aswell and am starting to learn how to care about others. my friend you have my respect and 3 clappies for you
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Aww I love you so much, it's amazing ^^ and this iis so beautiful You're so special and amazing, and you've helped me so much ^^ I love you so much precious ^^
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Oh..but you should correct it. Like maybe it was just something you wanted to write, not some big time deal you wanted to give to a publisher, but at the same time, you could enter it in and win in many contests. Aah..here I am, talking to you about contest..I'm so cold-hearted. XD
Anyways, it was still pretty cute, you could just convert it into a song or something. If this is non-fiction, just wondering whether you told your girlfriend about this...I'd be pretty impressed if my bf wrote something like that.
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This was so sweet. If they haven't already, your special person should read this! Very heartfelt without being corny. You did a good job with expressing your feelings in a genuine and real way, without making it contrived and cheesy. Adorable!
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Awww, this is so cute nice job.
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Nope. It doens't sound like a rant at all. Its so sweet. Dipers ish luckeh. x3
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