I lay my head on the pillow and I had a vision. I was standing in a meadow, with all the flowers in the world around me. I spun around, enjoying the scent of the flowers.1
But as my shadow fell on them, the all shrank and withered away. I stood still, shocked at what had happened when I was spinning. Then the worst happened.2
A big whirlwind blew up and whipped all all the flowers and trees away. A voice echoed from some unknowen place. "The cursed has come to my magnificent garden. Now the acursed's family will pay the price!"3
The tornado whirled and spun untill it reached the top of heaven and back. I was swept up and away, and everything went black.4
I woke up with someone calling my name. "Kitty, Kitty." I rose up and staggered to the caller. "Kitty, Kitty!." As I drew nearer, the voice grew fainter, and fainter, untill it faded away completely.5
With a gasp, I realised it was my mother. I fell down and sobbed like a baby. Now i could hear my familys voices too. "Kitty, Kitty!" Cay cried. "Kitty Kitty." her dad called.6
But I was beyond hearing him. I cried untill I could cry no more. And on the ground, being tortured far fast the imagination, I died.
A contest entry
- Dreams and Visions by angellove.
1050 points, ended December 20, 2008, 16 entries
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I'm still alive. Don't worry! It was just a vision!!!
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good thing we go to the same church, huh T-rex!!!!
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cool
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Kewl, You Should Make It Into A Longer Story, And I Like The Idea Of The Sence Of Perfectness In The Meadow Being Taken Away, If you did make it a longer story I wouldn't make her die because i think It would be better if she found a way to overcome whatever evil the voices were.
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 2, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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Being cursed and everything dying around you and being swept up because of what you did that was so wrong is a lie of the enemy. Only the enemy would make you think you are alone in this world and torture you and keep you away from your loved ones. I'm glad we were given the authority from a higher power to rebuke such lies. It is also already written that the price has already been paid for the original curses, through the blood of the innocent Lamb. All that needs to be done now is to repent and turn from that which is sin and turn back to the One who loved you before you were born.
I hope this helps. This vision was either a warning from God to steer away from an open door to the enemy, or it could have been a vision from the enemy. In any case, the nature of being cursed and abandoned needs to be rebuked.
God speed to you in the contest.
Beth
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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harroooow
Kuwl
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scary vision.
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I think it pretty even thou i wrote it
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