I had been traveling with the caravan for nearly a week. I must say that I found it quite enjoyable to be with a group of people again, even if these were not my people. Things had been somewhat bad at first what with the daily taunting from the girls and nasty stares from the young men. It had changed though, when Rik stood up for me that day. Though I had not made any new friends amongst the girls they gave me my space and left me alone. 1
I did have a newfound friend in Rik though which made the journey more pleasant. He even began to teach me how to make small wood carvings. I don't think mine could ever be as good as his but it gave me something to pass the time with. One day he began to question me about my past though...2
"Aleen, where are you from?"3
What? He hadn't seemed to care before. "Conra," I replied, "Why?"4
"Just curious. So, how'd you end up out here in Vamar then?"5
"What is this, and interview," I replied sarcastically.6
"No, I'm your friend, I'm just concerned and I want to know more about you. I know you have some big secret, I figured that out when I first looked into your lonely eyes. If you don't want to tell me that's fine but I want you to know that you can trust me."7
Trust. That's something I hadn't been able to do in a long time. Could I really trust Rik? Isn't that what true friends do, trust each other? Maybe I could talk to him about my quest. It might be good to let off a little of my burden. There was only one other I could talk to and he was either on the other side of the planet or maybe even dead. Yes, I had no idea where my brother was and no way of really finding out. I decided to think about what Rik said though, maybe we were truly friends and in that case he deserved to know my history.8
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This was nice to read- makes me forget about disgusting advertising finals. All these other people are like, "boo hoo, it's too short, waaaah!" I think it's just fine- I think it's brilliant that you were able to pack such imagery, personality, and emotion in such short space. I love it!!! (and I will try to read more when I find time!!!)
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Finals are for losers, you should drop out of college and become a traveling bard.
Or not.
Anyways, I'm going to repeat what everyone else did...it was too short! I enjoy Aleen's point of view and look forward to you writing more about her! -
Oh, this part is the third part of the story, Aleen is the first part then Rik's Journal is the second. Read those but i know, I always tend to leave off at critical points. I wanted to write more but I'm in college and finals are coming up so I've been studying like crazy. Thanks for the comment though.
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A good write for a first part, but I think I understand why people hate when I dangle at the end now, it's bothering the blazes out of me! Write the next part soon!
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Sorry it was so short. Gotta study for finals though. I will try my best to write more soon. Which would you like me to work on first though, The Never Ending Waterfall or Lonely Silence?
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It was short, i'm not happy. I want more. Trust? i have major trust issues so i related to her dilema, keep it up. and pls try to make the next chapter a bit longer. good luck, don't keep us waiting long
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Brillient, shame it's short, but i can't talk, but brillient keep it up, can't wait for the next part, hope you have time to write it soon!
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