In the world, there are saints and devils, healers and murderers, rulers and underlings, servants and kings, those who create and those who destroy- what one becomes is what they choose and what people choose defines the human race.
Author notes
hmmmm... I hope this isn't too long. I tried to make it as short as possible. A more challanging contest than one would think, this is. Thank you for hosting a great contest, DaDa, and to anyone else who reads it, thank you for gving the time. 
A contest entry
- Humanity by Finis.
135 points, ended December 13, 2008, 29 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Just my opinion
Comments
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It's like summing the meaning of the universe up in a paragraph! Wow.
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wow something really provoking here. It sounded very profound and was very short which makes the piece more powerful in my eyes. Nice take on humanity in chaos.
Might I mention it looks like spiffy start to a story really if you think about it, might be good for anything relating to stories.
I like this part :what one becomes is what they choose cause it also related to the way we chose our own destiny in my opinion.
well done.
I did enjoy reading it
Blair
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Thank you. I twas for a contest, define humanity in one sentece. I didn't win, but I liked mine anyway. It's what I think. ^_^ Anyway, he chose ppl who used symbolism, so I guess I just didn't have what he was lookign for... anyway,. thankls for the commetn. I'm glad you liked it, I hope my tiny sentence entertained you.
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That is a very interesting take on the world, lol. It was interesting for such a short piece.
-Raf-
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Hm. Interesting and completely true. Great piece.
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Great thought ,i am 1001% agree with u dear. i enjoyed ur one sentance ...good luck .
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Awesome job. I enjoyed reading this. (I'm at school readin it. hehe)
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You have two is's after what one: what one is (is)
Very well said Sheika, very well said. Humanity is a very hard thing to describe, I thought about entering the contest but couldn't come up something to enter. It is a very hard thing to define.
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I changes is to becomes. That bugged me when I wrote it, but I couldn't think of what to replace the Is's with. lol
I'm glad you liked it.
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Good entry!
I really do agree. It's up to us to choose who we are!
It could do with a little bit of shortening, though, particularly the last part, what with the "is is"...it really threw me off.
On the whole, well done. Good luck. -
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I changed the is to becomes. I apologize, again for the legnth of the sentence. I couldn't figure out how to shorten it. Thank you fpr reading.
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Do think it reads better with "becomes."
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I think so, do you?
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Definitely. I think you've got a winner now.
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^_^ Thank you.
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