"The real world"

You walk around wondering what this world is about1

and how your supposed to know the way in and the way out2

You want people to understand that the world is a unforgiven place3

and that life,love, and hapiness will once reach its place4

People will come and go and life will keep on going5

but the ones you really need will always be reassuring6

So just walk the world and learn your way around7

cause the only ones you'll need will always be around8

Spenser BreAnne Jackson9

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  • So Strange Greeters member
    November 26, 2008

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    Hmm... this was very interesting to me, because it spoke for a lot of people with a big emotion. I think that for your age, your mind must be very bright, because this was very well written, Spenser. I enjoyed everything about this and just hope that you continue writing such wonderful pieces as this one. The rhyme you put into this poem just flowed so well and it couldn't have been better, unless you wrote more.

    Keep up the great work and welcome ot the site. I sure hope you love this site in the near future as much as I do and come to visit soon and often.

    My favorite lines are probably lines three and four... but all of them were very well written.