The rain trickled through the branches,
down the trees reaching for the sky.
I look up at the elegant limbs,
breathing out deeply in a sigh.1
Tears fall down my face,
just as easily as the rain.
There is no life in my tears though,
just lots of pain.2
I wander among the flowers,
wondering how they can bloom so bright.
My life used to be the same,
then someone turned out the light.3
I'm enclosed in a terrifying darkness,
a never ending torment.
Nature is my refuge,
my only despairing pain vent.4
I used to love a girl,
she stole my breath away.
She captured my heart,
and for it I still pray.5
She never gave it back,
just took it away with her.
Leaving me alone and empty,
my life a smooth grey blur.6
I still wish that she would come,
that she might still give it back.
But slowly that hope slips away,
Like the world turning an ever darker black.7
Suddenly under the trees,
a beam of sunshine there.
She stood under the light,
her skin glowing fair.8
She smiled towards me,
and slowly gave back what was mine.
My heart began to heal,
and my life began to shine.9
The light invaded my darkness,
driving out all the horrors within.
She ran towards me and embraced me,
as my face lit up in a grin. 10
We danced beneath the sky,
as the sapphire rain began to slow.
Petals showered down upon us,
as tender as the love I remember and know.11
She gave me back my life,
the key back out into reality.
We vowed never again to part,
as I beamed with new-found vitality.12
I had hope.13
Author notes
Is this a bit weak? Happiness and sadness.
A contest entry
- Maii Contest! by Rain4Life.
120 points, ended January 27, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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I really like this. Really nice poem, and you did a great job. I see so much potential in you!!
I love the imagery I got with this, I loved following the story of this. It was really good.
Keep writing, and I know you'll just get better and better!
Great work, thank you so much for entering my contest, and I wish you the best of luck!
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I love your poem!! It is very deep and founding!!!
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yes this is okay. Very good in fact. I love your imagery. I think it is written with lots of emotion. Good job. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering this into my contest.
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DUDE, THIS WAS BRILLIANT! MY GOD!
It had a nice flow, the words rhymed good.
But there is one problem... You went over the line limit, but I'll let it slide because this was so brilliant!
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Ooops, sorry. I didn't see the word limit. Thank you!
P.S This isn't a prewrite, this was made for you!
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