The Heap

I keep them in the back of my closet
In a big untidy heap1

I go through them once in a while
But I never get to sorting them2

I recognize every single one
And I remember most of them3

Some are very old
Just a few are very new4

Some are small, barely curved
Thoughtful little things5

Some are broad
And warm6

Many are fake
So fake you could tell from a mile away7

One or two of them are perfect
Schoolbook examples, toothpaste commercial perfection8

But most are ugly
I don’t care9

Some look completely insane
But happily insane10

I keep them in the back of my closet
In a big untidy heap11

My pile of used-up smiles12


Author notes

My first attempt at free verse. Actually I find it very hard to avoid rhyming. Guess that’s because I started with songwriting before I went on to stories and poems.

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  • WritersEffigy gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    Wow, I'm a big fan of free verse poetry, and I really enjoyed this. Wonderfully done, really.

    You're a finalist.


  • KiwiGurl
    November 30, 2008

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    Thats really good! The only thing that kinda bugged me was #8, the last line. It seemed out of place, but I liked the idea. The rythem flowed really well. Keep it up and good luck in my contest!