Phaedra and I arrived at my house in no time. Devouring the last of our ice cream. I went inside to tell my mom that we were back,but to my surprise she wasn't there. I figured she must have gone to the store or something so thought nothing of it. 1
Pheadra suggested to go to the playground at our school to swing. We raced off and got there in five minutes. We always love swinging on the swings. We lean back and can imagine that we are flying while we stare at the clouds.2
"Pheadra,do you want to live in a castle with me when we grow older?"3
"Of course,we will be together for all eternity!" Her reply. "That's great,i can't think of not living together,it would be horrible."4
Jumping off the swings we ran off to go on the merry-go-round.5
"I'll push you first,then i can get on and you'll push next."6
"OK."7
After about an hour of playing at the playground we grew tired of the same stuff. It was starting to get late now. The sky was beginning to darken.8
"I think we should be heading home now before it gets too dark." "Ya,I'm hungry now too,i don't want to miss supper."9
We rode down the road and i saw Pheadra to her house next door and peddled into my garage.10
"Mom!" "I'm back now!" 11
"Oh,hey honey sorry i was doing the laundry."12
Author notes
uhm...not good....but..im kinda trying to make this interesting............
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