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I love the story so far, and you have done a wonderful job introducing the characters and setting...also the whole feel of the realm you have put us into...1

Grammatical and spelling errors always stand out for me, as I used to teach English...and write a lot myself. I have even published a couple books...lol...and editing is the worst!!2

Please keep me posted when you write more...This is something I would definately read!!! Best wishes now and always...3

Write on!4

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If you want, I can help you edit...this is just an example of what I ran into ...7

sweat laugh: I believe you mean sweet...8

quite movements and little creeks. Quiet movements and little creaks (creeks are small bodies of water...)9

councilor is correct spelling not councillor10

kings choice s/b king's11

kings palace s/b king's also

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  • tony333
    November 20, 2008

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    Thank you

    Thanks for the comments, they are very much appreciated.

    I am glad you get the sense of the realm I hope to introduce. I find it hard reading my own work back and seeing how it would be viewed by others.

    Arghh!! Editing!! To tell the truth I'm not too brilliant with spelling and grammer. Thanks For pointing out a couple of my mistakes to me.

    I would greatly appreciate any help you could give me as this is the first time writing a book for me. I know it's ambitous to try writing a fantasy saga of such length for a beginner - And I'm not sure if I have the ability - , but all I can do is try my hardest

    Again, thanks for the comments.

    Regards, Tony


    • islekine
      November 21, 2008
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      Of course you can do it...lol....I am a beginner too...lol

      at least at writing a saga...mine is three books long...I wrote the middle first...am working on the beginning and the end at the same time off and on now...
      Keep it up...it's a lot of work...but very self rewarding!! I will help you edit if you wish...spell check would be a big help!
      Best wishes now and always...
      and keep me posted!!!
      Write on!