Rist walked though the debris, hundreds of bodies lay around him, his armour had been damage so he had taken it off after the battle ended. There was a slight northern wind, but the sky was empty, hollow, the only sound was that of Rist's footsteps, as he walked though the abandoned battlefield, looking at his fallen friends and foes. Rist was sad and furious, he recognised far too many of his colleges faces, and he only saw a few of of the calsuties.1
Rist stopped by the fallen body of his friend, Latman, he had not been the smartest of people, but he had been good at following instructions and incredible strong. 'Latman' Rist said looking down upon his old friend, 'You were my first companion, my most trusted, what did you do that was worth dying for?' Whilst looking at his companion's fallen body he saw a old ripped bag next to his body, Rist remembered that Latman had carried his bag near his heart always, even though it was empty it was supposed to bring luck. Rist picked it up and peered inside.2
Author notes
Yeah I have to get ready for school now so there will be an opening part 2 soon.
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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All my storys are supenseful because i have to leave abrutly, food, sleep, school you know genrally life gets in the way.lol
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Hey, I really like this story. As always, a very suspenseful ending. There is so much that can happen I can't wait for the next part. Keep up the good work.
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THis is like so suspenceful, you really can spin a tale. This just made me crave more, loved the fast pace, and the cliffhanger ending.
great work, pls im me when u post the second part. really lovin' it =) great writing, i really loved it 
can't help myself really good
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Wow, this was a great short story
Keep writing, this was a fantastic opening- a great introduction Thanks for commenting on my monologue 
All the best,
Pozo
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