Draven's call

Calie looked at the blood on her hands, she thought to herself over and over again 'what have I done???'....1

Anticipation....She sat for a moment only to notice the cops were comming, she had to run or they would take her away. Or, she could just kill them. 2

"No I can't kill anybody, this was all a big accident...they have to understand." 3

She heard a voice comming from the midst of the air. 4

"You are kidding right??? They wouldn't believe you, they are just stupid mortals!!" 5

Calie looked astonished, "Draven-is it..really you?" 6

She had a small studder because it didn't seem possible.7

"No dip-shit it's god, I come to make you a prophet hahaha."8

Calie walked aimlessly around the room looking for the voice's body.9

"No need to get all cruel like sheesh,uhm one question tho."10

Calie began to worry, Draven was murdered two years ago in a hit and run accident, his body was never found that night but the car had been hit, flipped ten times and collided with a semi-truck. The body of the car was found in the river. Calie thought she was going insane, maybe she was just hearing the voice of him in her head. Did she really love him THAT much??? Calie and Draven are vampires and had fallen in love, Draven fell in love with Calie and turned her into a vampire, she had an "accident" one day and killed her family. She had to change her looks and her location. She never meant to hurt anybody. But this wasn't her fault, she was under the spell of Tithal.11

"Draven, I thought you died, your car...It-"12

Draven cut her off by saying in a cold, distempered voice. 13

"-Yes- 14

I know, the car tipped and blah blah, no body was found though. Calie, I never told you because I didn't think you'd understand. I am immortal, sorry I don't know why I never told you, It didn't seem right...but-"15

Within seconds Draven appeard out of no-where.16

"Calie, come with me, please, we need to get you out of here."17

He grabbed her arm and took her out of the house through the back door.18

Like magic, they appeard in a home which was very dark, cold, damp, and had very little life forms in it.19

"What happend Calie?? Why were you in..."THERE"???20

Calie's voice softened.21

"I don't care if he's supposed to be some huge vampire hunter, I really DON'T. I had to kill him, he was going to kill me. So I had to get to him before he could get to me."22

"And??? So you do it in MID SIGHT, in THEIR world??!?!?!?!?!" 23

"I HAD TO DRAVEN OK, I JUST HAD TO."24

"Im sorry...I didn't mean to yell just-"25

Calie was in tears.26

"It's ok, I know. Well then lets just rest until morning."27

They weren't anything ordinary. They lived in a town with witchcraft, vampires, murders, and corruption. They could stay out all day or night, it didn't really matter, they can take the sun, none of that B-S. 28

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  • theoneandonlySlayer
    April 25, 2005
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    This is really good. I'm in love with it already.


  • ayten
    April 21, 2005
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    It's a nice story, well written, with a decent rythm to it. A bit vague and mysterious which is always a good thing. I love supernatural stories and this one could be a good one. I really liked the part with the hearing voices, and 'accidents', gring on the fantasy world. Keep writing and keep us on the edge of our seats.


  • no1special
    April 20, 2005
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    that is a great star to a story ... you must keep it up because it is really interesting!
    Kepp up the great wrok!
    ~no1special~

  • WrapMeUpTight
    April 20, 2005
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    this is awesome.....so where is there rest?.......come on gurl....i know you want to put it in here....thats besides the point.....this is really good......great work

    Bridget