Sunlit Night: Chapter 1

"Hey Ryan!" Kisomi strode up, bouncing happily.1

"Hey. Why're you so happy?" Ryan laughed. 2

"Eh. I just am."3

"Alright, whatever. Wanna come to Avaj Alal? I was just heading there." Ryan spun on his freelines to slow down, since Kisomi was walking. Showing off, he flipped the front freeline(his left, since he rode regular) up into his hand and spun on the single right freeline. Then, he tried to drop the freeline in the classic 'stomp'. Unfortunately, Ryan miscalculated, and stepped on it upside down. 4

"Augh!" He flailed his arms uselessly, and flopped with a thump on his rear. "My ass...hehehe." Ryan flushed a slight pink.5

"Show off." Kisomi grinned and continued walking. 6

Ryan got up, shoving his freelines his backpack, seeing the cafe door just around the corner. It was good to see Kisomi again. After both leaving middle school, they had split and attended different high schools. It had been a couple weeks since the start of school, and the two friends had only been able to talk online. He had missed her quite a bit, even only for a couple weeks, Ryan mused. Entering the cafe, he walked quickly up to the counter. 7

"The usual?" Jamie Anderson, the girl who worked the counter, smiled dazzlingly. She was a junior at the same high school(Skyline) as Ryan, who was a senior. Ryan came here often, and directly after school. He could never get how she got here so fast. "Ryan?"8

"Um, yeah. Thanks." He snapped out of his reverie and pulled out his wallet, turning to Kisomi. "Do you want something?"9

"I can pay for myself, but thanks." Kisomi read Ryan like a book sometimes. "I'll have a medium chai latte."10

They each paid for their orders and waited. Soon, Jamie put a cold caramel macchiato and a cold chai latte on the counter. 11

"Thanks, Jamie." Ryan flashed a quick smile at her and took his drink. 12

As Ryan and Kisomi were walking off, she poked him and grinned mischievously. 13

"Oh, shut up." Nevertheless, he grinned. Turning his face slightly so she wouldn't see his blush, Ryan pulled out the freelines and jumped on them. "So, what's up? We haven't seen each other for a couple weeks. Even if we did talk online."14

"Not much. I hate my Geography teacher though. She's such a bitch. Like, the other day..." Kisomi talked and gestured excitedly, as Ryan just nodded and agreed with what she was saying, leaving his mind free to wander. It turned towards the macchiato he had in his hands, and then to Jamie. Her dark hair, and her eyes. Those chocolate brown eyes, that always seemed so soft and smiling. 15

"Hello? Earth to Ryan!" Kisomi snapped her fingers in front of his face. "You've been silent for almost a minute!" She grinned slyly. "I bet you were thinking about Jamie...!" 16

"No! Nothing like that. Just moping about all the homework I have." Ryan replied quickly. A little too quickly. Kisomi just shook her head and sniggered silently.17

Just then, Ryan's phone rang. He pulled it out and put it up to his ear. "Hello?...Yeah...Okay...Now?...Fine." He closed it and slipped it back in his pocket. "I gotta go. See you...whenever... Kisomi."18

"Aw, fine. Bye, Ryan." Kisomi hugged him. 19

Ryan patted her elbow, because she had trapped his arms to his side, and that was about all he could reach. When Kisomi finally released him, he accelerated and turned down a side street. His mind also turned back to Jamie. Ryan shook his head like a dog, and forced her to the back of his mind, concentrating on his chores he had when he got home. No use. He sighed, and pulled out his iPod. Might as well listen to some good songs, he thought. It was a preoccupied Ryan who went to bed that night.

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  • Kyndal
    December 1, 2008

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    WOWOWOW

    wow! this is great! i loved it! so need suggestions... umm... okay... maybe Ryan should ask Jamie out? GASP! and Kisomi got jealous cause she liked him? woa. lol just a suggestion of course GOOD LUCK!

  • Renvek
    November 25, 2008

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    I am lost, what is freeline stomp etc. Line 4 and in 14 in one it is singular and the other is plural. As a synopsis or a first chapter didn't grab me. Could get interesting later however there is connect loss in the first paragraph as the author assumes reader knows what being spoken about which limits audience base. On the flip side the conversation is believable and forshadowing friendships for possible tensions later in the story.

  • jking4
    November 23, 2008
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    nice story.

  • xeranthemuffinman
    November 16, 2008
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    rofl

    thats kind of how i feel when thinkin about 2 XD. Anyway, nice.

  • sweetie314sam
    November 16, 2008
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    *crooked smile

    lol sounds JUST like me! lol can't wait to see where the story goes! i like it all though...

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