The purple ball.

I walked into the bowling ally with my friend, Nancy. 'Come on, Emma,' she said as she picked up a ball and rolled it in. What the- she beat me. I could only knock down 7 pins at a time but she, she beat me and knocked down 8.1

I clapped my hands for Nancy, and she said, 'I finally could beat you, Emma'. I replied, 'only just'. I picked up a purple bowling ball, determined to beat Nancy. I bowled it, and to my surprise, I knocked down all ten. I then said to Nancy, 'I beat you'. But Nancy wasn't listening, she said 'no!'2

Then the lights were suddenly off, Nancy panicked but I said, 'it's okay, the lights will turn on'. Before I could even sit down on the floor, a scream came, I clasped my hands on my ears, and so did Nancy. Then the lights flickered on again, just as I said but there was more than the normal, bowling ally.3

I saw something behind me, the purple bowling ball was screaming so loudly, at something, but why could the purple ball even scream? But I was sure it wasn't that, it was Nancy petrified. Now I was starting to get frightened to, I trembled all over. There was also blood splattered on the floor too.4

The purple ball turned into a skeleton, it looked so weird, and scary, it had no eyeballs. The skeleton also was holding a knife on it's right hand. But then, the skeleton grasped Nancy's throat with it's left hand! I screamed and backed away, it didn't catch me. The skeleton held out it's knife, pointing it at Nancy's heart. I knew that I had to save her. Nancy was gasping for air now, but I couldn't save her.5

The skeleton was about to plunge the knife into Nancy's heart, I held out my hand to hold onto the skeleton's bony arm, breathing hard, and saying, ''stop!' 6

To my surprise, the skeleton's arm broke apart, and I punched the skeleton's other arm and it broke apart from the grasp of Nancy's neck.7

Nancy breathed very quickly, and very hard, and she managed to say, 'thank you Emma'. I turned around facing the skeleton, not scared because it had no hands to hurt me, I realised that it's legs would kick me, so I used all my strength to kick it's legs.8

Although it hurt when I kicked the bones, I did it. I continued kicking the skeleton and all it's bones shattered into pieces, me and Nancy tidied all the mess, putting the bones into the rubbish bin. The purple bowling ball was gone, but I was glad it was.9

Nancy was not breathing so quickly now, and was speaking. 'If you ever roll that purple ball and knock down all ten pins, then the bowling ball will become a skeleton.'10

'But why?' I asked curiously, wanting to know why. 'Because I've done that before but with another one. There are only 2 bowling balls which can turn into skeletons and we've defeated them all. I couldn't do it this time because I was caught by the skeleton, and I was very scared, even though I already done it.'11

'Then why were there blood?' I asked. Nancy replied, 'the skeleton always gives you a warning by blood, I suppose.12

I felt kind of proud, for defeating the purple ball, and happy, to know that I wouldn't meet it again.13

Author notes

I chose OPTION 1# because when I went to camp, people kept telling scary stories about blood on the sheets and the lights turning off and falling off. So I got inspiration from that.

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  • patrickhschan
    November 25, 2008
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    why did you write this? and did you know what I said ? tell me and what o you tank?

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  • patrickhschan
    November 18, 2008
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    oh my goodness that was grat


  • caitecola
    November 15, 2008

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    Hm, this is a good start. I'm so impressed how you took real life experiences and incorporated them into your story. That's exactly the kind of thing I like to read, but I have to admit that your story is just a little bit confusing, and some of the "purple ball history" should be explained a little bit better. I don't understand how it happened or why, but otherwise, it was a good write.


  • Shimmerfairy
    November 15, 2008

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    I admit I'm a teensy bit confused as to how the purple ball turned into a skeleton, and how Nancy knew about them. Maybe a little more detail into the background could be added?
    I really enjoyed this however and was on the edge of my seat when the skeleton grabbed Nancy!
    I want to know more...!! I'm not the only one who leaves a story hanging!!
    Great Job and good luck in the comp!


  • flowerbee1234
    November 15, 2008

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    I like this. It is a good beginning, a good middle, and a great end. You are a good writer! Keep up the great work!

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