The Day at the Cafe Chapter 1

"Oh it's time to let it go, This world's got a funny way of turning 'round on you, When a friend tries to stab you right in the face, Losing faith in everything i thought i hoped i knew, Don't sweat it, {it was} set on a false pretense, Betrayed but not gonna be willing to change, And it doesn't seem likely to fade, Betrayed but not gonna be willing to change, Cu-cu-cu-cuz you know, It's a sacrifice, False pretense you'll hurt again, Stop pretending to deny, False pretense you'll hurt again" *smack*1

"Gah dang, I'm gonna be late..." I got out of bed sluggishly, but tried to quicken my step when i looked at the clock and saw i had 10 min to get ready and get there. "Shoot! Shoot, shoot, SHOOT!" I slipped on my tan pants and black button down shirt and my lime green converse and ran out the door. Glad I work at coffee shop I skipped breakfast. Much of what I was feeling that morning was from what happened at the end of the school year.

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  • You didn't follow directions! In order to submit something for option #6 you were supposed to message me with a summary asking for permission to enter it. But, since this was pretty short, I'll let it go. It's an interesting beginning, but there isn't much to it. At this point the story could be about anything. Great cliffhanger though. Thank you for entering my contest.


  • AfterTheEnd
    November 17, 2008
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    Umm...Okay Then

    I get the second paragraph, but what is up with the first one?


    • jking4
      November 20, 2008
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      song called false pretense by Red Jumpsuit Apparatus


  • writers.elbow
    November 16, 2008
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    AAAAAA

    SAM!!!!!!! IM SO CONFUSED!!!!!!!!!!


  • The empty sea
    November 14, 2008
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    hmmm...

    not much excitement, but lots of cliffhanger stuff, nice!

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